Part 1
By Dorothy Colleen
I woke, and realized I was restrained. I also felt a terrible dislocation in time. I somehow knew I had been unconscious for a significant period of time. Fear poured over me. Had I been kidnapped:? So many movies and TV shows came back to me, that when I heard soft footsteps and saw a shadow at the end of my bed, I actually squeaked, “Don’t hurt me, please.” “Nobody’s hurting anybody, sweetie” a woman said, and I looked at her and realized she was a nurse.
“I am in a hospital?” I asked. “Yes, hun, and we are glad to see you awake. You gave us a bit of a scare for a while” she said. “Can you tell me what happened to me? I asked. “I don’t remember anything.” “The doctor come by to check on you in a bit, and he will explain what we know” She said. She headed back towards the door, and suddenly my anxiety spiked, and I started to tear up. “Did I . . . did I do something bad?” She turned back to me and asked, “Why would you think that hun?” “Well”, I said, almost against my will, “I’m all tied up and I don’t remember what happened and I am scared and alone, and . .. .” I choked up and couldn’t continue.
Would you like someone to sit with you for a while dear?” She asked. She went to the door and looked out, and then paused. “Is it ok if it’s a man, hun? I can try and find a woman if that’s better” I didn’t understand why she would say that, so I said “Its Ok”
Then a man in a security uniform stepped in. “What’s your name?” I asked. “Hank” he said. “You will keep me safe, won’t you Hank?” I asked him. “I promise” he replied. “Will you sit beside me and talk to me?” “Sure, if you would like.” I looked at the nurse and said “He’s ok, I guess. But please find out how long I will be tied up, and if you could, see if my family is here?” “You got it hunny.” she said.
Then Hank sat down, and said, “Ok, what would you like to talk about? I can’t really tell you anything about your condition, I am afraid” “That’s ok, I said. “Just tell me about yourself, or something else nice. I suddenly feel a little tired again, and I may drop off, I hope you wont mind.”
He turned out to have a very soothing baritone voice, and I started to drift off, as he was talking about his wife and kids. I was almost asleep when he said “You kind of remind me of my daughter.” Hearing that gave me a jolt, and I tried to fight off the growing need to sleep. But I was not successful, and as I feel back into unconsciousness thinking, “Daughter? But I am a guy.”
Comments
Talk about
... leaving someone hanging! Portia
Portia
What to expect
Is this a short - short story of less than 500 words, as it says at the top? Or part of a series, as it says at the bottom?
I went outside once. The graphics weren' that great.
you are correct
My apoligies, when I started this one, I honestly thought it would end up standing alone. but afterward, I could see where it could contine. I will try for more clearity in the future
Not so much of a surprise
This short chapterlet was I suppose to have a surprise at the end. I guess because it was on this site, it was kind of to be expected, so the end was not so surprising after all. Otherwise, well the characterization was good but it was really a bit too short to let one develop anything more of an impression.
Briar
Briar
OK and....
As always, so much to read, so little time and only one of me :)
The English Teacher
So much to read, so little time and only one of me :)
The English Teacher
Interesting start.
Interesting start.
a wtf moment
In this little sketch we have exactly as much information about what's going on as your character.
It really captures her confusion and dread, I'll say that.
I think it would work better as a stand alone story if the narrator gave us some muddled memories
about the transformation process alluded to in the tags, so that even though she doesn't have
a clue about what's going on, we would be able to piece a bit more of the story together.
Then again, I'm just wild about series', and the information could be given
over subsequent chapters, as the confused lassie figures it all out,
hunting down clues and/or whoever/whatever's responsible...
~~hugs, Laika
Anything new from E-Girl in the works Dorothy? I loved that one.
And remember...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ifLqzLEB3E0