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Hello, this is my first story, hope you like it. More parts will be added.
Hello my name is John. I am 16 years old. It's just me, my mom Bryley and my sister Sarah. I sometimes wear my sister's clothes when nobody is home.
One day though my mom and sister went out shopping so I went in to my sister's room. I got her skirt and high heels and a top. When I got dressed I heard my mom's car pull up.
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Hello
Part 2 will be out soon
Errrr?
A bit too short for my liking.
Hey
Part 2 will be out soon
Honestly way too short. What
Honestly way too short. What you have there is enough for someone to read on the front page, You pulled us in with this picture of a cheese burger, but then when we come in, it's nothing more than a plastic toy for a barbie doll. There's no content. hate to be this harsh but it...irks me a bit when I was expecting something longer. especially when you said there'd be around 500 words in the tags up top. seeing as there's less than 100 I can't even call this good cause I'm not seeing what I should be seeing.
Never be afraid to push yourself to new limits. While you might not see the path, you will be amazed at what you can achieve.
Part 2 will be out soon. And
Part 2 will be out soon. And I am new didn't know what the 500 words mean
Interesting start, however
Interesting start, however kind of like an appetizer, before the main course is served. Left me wanting more, so now here I am waiting for the next long chapter to appear. :-)
Welcome to the "club".
Thinks!
The next one is going to be pretty long
Well...
You did end this part on a cliff-hanger -- which is a nice place to end a part.
-- Daphne Xu
That's not a story, are you
That's not a story, are you teasing us ?
Karen