A Prayer Answered: Chapter 7

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  The long awaited return of Sandra and her friends. Find out what happened and how things change for Sandra and how this attack affects the perpetrator.
 
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A Prayer Answered
Chapter Seven
By Sara D.

Chapter 7
 
I woke up with the realization someone was squeezing my hand and could hear the blazing sound of a siren. I was jolted up quickly when I felt a bump as I soon realized I was in the back of an ambulance and the back of my head hurt like hell. My vision was a bit fuzzy as I tried to look at who was holding my hand. It quickly cleared up and I could see it was Brian holding my hand. I then could see the ambulance guy working on an IV and was watching a monitor on the side very closely.

“Oh thank God you’re ok; you were kicked in the head by that rat bastard Kevin. He got his though.” Brian said looking pissed off and then happy I was conscious.

As the fuzziness continued to wear off, I began to hear the driver in the front making calls on the radio, about my condition. I heard the following which made no sense to me.

“Inbound one female juvenile, sixteen with a contusion and a two inch laceration to the anterior portion of the lower head and neck area, unconscious for five minutes, on line with fluids and 10 CC’s.”

I could not understand the rest; I was now looking over at Brian who still had a worried look on his face.

“My head hurts.” I squeaked out then heard the guy in the back with us tell the driver my condition up date.

“She’s conscious.”

“That is good to hear.” The driver responded.

“What happened after I blacked out?” I asked Brian who was still squeezing my hand, he did not have time to answer because the ambulance stopped and I was quickly wheeled out and was hurried into an examination room where a bunch of people in white coats and smocks were waiting to examine me.

I presumed the man in the white coat was the doctor as he began looking in my eyes with a light. He looked at the monitors hooked up to me and then took a gauze bandage to the back of my head. After a few minutes he sighed in relief and explains to the others my condition.

“It looks as if we have a very lucky young lady here, but just to be sure I want a CT scan of her skull and then get a local and stitch up the cut in the back of her head. It does not look to bad and will probably heal with a very small scar. How do you feel young lady?”

“A little out of it, my head hurts and my vision was blurry when I woke up in the ambulance.” I said feeling a little scared I might be hurt more on the inside. “You’re sure I’m ok.”

“Yes, I just want to rule out the possibly of brain injury but you do have a slight concussion, and will need stitches in the cut on your neck, most likely two or three will do, it’s not that bad of a cut.”

“What’s a concussion doctor?” I asked not knowing what it meant.

“That means your brain is bruised and it will clear up in a few days to a week. I will send a letter requesting you not participate in any physical activity for the rest of the week and will see you next week to take the stitches out and follow up on you then. Does that sound ok?”

“Yes, thank you, Doctor?”

“Sorry, I’m Doctor Jenson a Pediatric resident here at Mercy hospital.

“Thanks for taking care of Sandra.” Brian said.

“That’s my job, take care of the injured and cure their ails.” Dr. Jenson said chuckling. “Are you Sandra’s boyfriend? I heard you’re the one who fought off the bully who attacked her?”

“Yes I’m her boyfriend, and yes I took care of that bully, and good I hope.”

“I heard he’s ok, just a broken spirit and bloody nose from what the school nurse has told the police.”

“Police, Brian’s not in trouble is he?” I asked concerned for Brian.

“That’s something he will have to ask the investigating officer. He’s waiting outside in the hall for you, if you would like Brian I’ll tell him your waiting for Sandra’s test results and will be out in a while.”

“Thanks Doctor, I’d like that.”

With that the Dr. Jenson walk out and spoke to the tall black officer in the hall, the officer smiled and nodded an affirmative and Dr. Jenson walked back in the examination room and was soon followed by a large piece of equipment being pushed into the room by a large guy in scrubs and an ID that read D. Jones, Orderly.

“Ok, the portable CT scanner is here so I’ll go ahead and get that out of the way, thank you Rick.” Dr. Jenson said to the big balding man.

“No problem Frank.” The orderly said and walked out.

Dr. Jenson the pushed it the rest of the way over to the bed I had been lying on and had me lay down and then turned on the machine. It made a low buzzing sound for a few minutes then Dr. Jenson turned off the scanner an pushed it into the far right corner of the exam room. He then sat at a computer terminal and brought up what could only be pictures of the inside of my head. He studied several images for a few minutes then stood up and came over to the side of the bed.

“Your scans are clear of any damaged, just a small bit of bruising from a mild concussion. You’ll have to stay in the hospital overnight for observation, but you will be able to go home tomorrow afternoon. Your principal Mrs. Sherman has informed me she has contacted your father and he’s on his way here.”

“Thank you.” I said relieved dad was coming to the hospital. A second later a short and skinny female nurse walked in with a tray and syringe and set the tray on the table next to the bed.

“Brian you can go out and speak to Officer Thompson while the nurse tends to Sandra’s stitches.” Dr. Jenson led Brian out to the corridor while I had stitches put in.

Once the nurse used the syringe, the area around the wound became numb and all I felt was a slight tug as she did the stitches. The nurse, Betty, finished in just a few minutes.”

“There we go, all finished. I was able to close the cut with just two stitches and used glue on the rest. It’ll heal nicely and most likely not leave a scar, and if it does it will be small and hidden by your hair.”

“Thank you nurse, will it hurt?”

“Call my Betty; it will be sore for a few days. Just keep it clean and covered until the stitches are removed. You’re a very pretty girl, how old are you?” Betty said sweetly

“I’m 16 Betty, and a sophomore in high school.” I answered.

“Is that cute boy in the hall your boyfriend?” Betty continued to talk as she tapped a bandage on the wound.

“Yes, that’s Brian, my knight in shining armor; apparently he stopped the boy who kicked me from doing anything else.” I told her very proud of him.

“Do you know why that boy did this to you?” She asked innocently unaware of my secret.

“Yah, I think it’s because I used to be a boy.” I told her a bit scared of what she might think.

“Oh, well I guess he’s just another boy not secure with his own manhood.” She said calmly and unaffected.

“You don’t mind?” I asked confused.

“No not at all, in fact my sister was just like you and has grown up to be a very special sister and friend.” Betty said with a grin. “I’ll give you her email and maybe you can talk to her if you like.”

“That would be great, thank you.” I said excited about talking with another person who had already gone through what I am.

“I’ll be back with her business card in a few minutes; it’s just in my locker down the hall.” Betty then left and Brian and the police officer walked in right as she left.

“Hello Ms. Davidson, I’m Officer Thompson and I’m investigating the attack on you at school today and I have a few questions to ask you.” He asked gently.

“Go ahead Officer Thompson; I’m ready to answer any questions you may have.” I was wondering how I could help I really did not see anything.

“Ok Ms. Davidson, at any time in the past few days did you at any time do anything that might be construed as flirting or inappropriate touching to Kevin Chambers?”

“Absolutely not Officer, I haven’t even spoken to him in at least a week.” I said a little mad at the question.

“Ok, calm down Ms. Davidson, I just need to get all the info from everyone involved and I’m not pointing fingers of blame at you.” Officer Thompson said in a calming tone.

“Sorry, Officer Thompson, but I am still a bit fuzzy and I did nothing to deserve this attack.”

“I realize that, you’re too lovely a young lady as far as I have seen and heard from many people at your school.” He said with a smile. “You have a lot of good friends and teachers who came to your aid and defended your honor when Kevin started spreading that you not only flirted with him, but you also exposed yourself to him in a sexual manner.”

I turned beet red in anger at such an outlandish lie. “How could he say such a thing, I was just getting my next class books out of my locker when I heard that piece of shit yell then the next thing I know I’m in an ambulance. No way is that horse’s ass going to get away with telling lies. What a piece of shit.” I almost screamed in anger, I don’t even remember ever being this angry before. I’ve always been passive and shy up till now.

“It’s ok to be angry Ms. Davidson, from what Brian and the other witnesses have told me this was a total unprovoked attack and that the perpetrator will be dealt with. I’m going to speak to his father once I’ve completed my interview with you.”

“Please call me Sandra, and thank you.”

“You are welcome.” His smile then turned to a frown. “I sorry but I have to ask you this final question, part of what Kevin was spreading at school after this incident was that just a few days ago you used to be a boy. All I see in front of me is a very nice girl, but does this rumor have any truth to it? He asked gently.

I started to wonder if I was in some sort of trouble for becoming a full time girl. I began to worry I might have to go back to being a boy, no way that was happening. I’m a girl now and no way is someone going to force me to change who I am. Officer Thompson must have seen the unhappy expression on my face.

“Look Sandra, not that it matters one way or another, but I am obligated to get the facts in this case. It will have no bearing on you and will only be used against your attacker in such cases that involve discrimination against persons in your alleged situation.”

“Yes it is true I was once a boy. I am a girl now and no one is going to tell me otherwise.” I said still a frustrated about what happen and what might happen when I return to school in a few days.

“Thank you for your honesty Sandra, It will indeed help if this incident goes to court. It’s up to you, as I said I will be contacting Mr. Chambers in a few minutes. At that time I will come back and discuss what might happen next. I’ll return shortly and once again thank you Ms. Davison.”

“You’re welcome Officer Thompson; I just hope that piece of shit Kevin get what he deserves.” I said still feeling hurt and angry at my attacker as Officer Thompson walked out the shaking his head.

“Watch your language young lady.”

“Daddy!!” I squealed my father walked in with an expression of worry that changed to a smile once he realized I was ok. My head hurt as I sprang up from the bed and jumped to my feet to hug him and I wobbled a bit.

“Careful Sandra, I don’t want to be the one who causes you to get hurt more.” Dad said with a smirk.

“Oh Daddy, I’m fine. The doctor said I can go back to school on Thursday, but I have to stay overnight for observation.” I told him trying to be smarter than him.

“I know sweetie, I just spoke with Dr. Jenson. He told me you’re a very lucky girl.” Dad gave me a big hug then turned to Brian. “I understand I owe you a great debt of gratitude young man for saving Sandra from a severe beating. You sir have my thanks and eternal appreciation, and Sandra is very fortunate to have a boyfriend like you Brian. You’re mother will be very proud of your actions today, and I will be sure to tell her how I feel about it.”

Brian could not help but turn red in embarrassment. “Thank you Mr. Davidson, I just reacted to protect the girl I love. I would not know what I would do if I had lost her. She’s my best friend and girlfriend in the world.” Brian said and smiled at me.

“I love you Brian.” I let slip out and gave him a kiss on the lips. We held it just for a few seconds and then were interrupted by the door opening and Officer Thompson came back in.

“Hello, I’m Officer Ben Thompson you must be Mr. Davidson.” The policeman said as he shook dad’s hand.

“Why yes I am, are you going to arrest the person responsible for this unprovoked attack?” Dad asked sternly.

“If I may sir may I speak to you outside regarding that point?” Officer Thompson asked and gestured to the corridor just outside my room.

Once they left the room I could see Dad and Officer Thompson talking through the glass in the door to the room. It looked like a civil conversation and not heated. I could see my dad nod his head from time to time in the affirmative. I began wondering what they were talking about; I did not have to wait long because they both came back in a few seconds later.

Dad came up to me and put his hand on my shoulder in a comforting manner. “Sandy, Officer Thompson has spoken with Mr. Chambers, Kevin’s dad about this. His initial reaction was one of shock and embarrassment. He said he is truly sorry for what his son has done to you. He has requested to meet with you and me to discuss alternative punishment other than arrest. He does say he will support whatever decision you make.” Dad said then squeezed my shoulder for support.

“Ok Dad, I’ll meet Mr. Chambers and talk with him. I’ll certainly hear what he has to say then make a decision then.” I told him a bit apprehensive.

“That’s very grown up of you Sandra, you must be very proud of your daughter Mr. Davidson.” Officer Thompson said.

“Yes I am very proud of Sandra; she is a very responsible and tender young lady.” Dad said then smiled at me.

“Mr. Chambers said he could be here in about an hour, he said something about needing to take care of his son first then he will meet with you here.” Officer Thompson explained.

“Thank you Ben.” Officer Thompson shook dad’s hand then left to wait somewhere for Mr. Chambers to show up.

“Honey, you should get some rest and Brian and I will go and see if we can fetch you something to eat.”

“Ok dad that sounds nice, I’d like some ice cream too.” I said greedily knowing I would get what I wanted.

“Of course your majesty, you ask and you shall receive.” Dad said jokingly. “Come on Brian let ‘Princess Sandra’ rest while us men fetch her some food.”

“Yes sir.” Brian continued. “My lady.” Brian said bowing as he exited the room. I’ll have to get him back for that one for sure. I took dad’s advice and lay down and closed my eyes and thought about what dad and Brian might talk about while out. I must have fallen asleep because the next thing I knew I was being woken up by someone tapping on my shoulder.

“Wake up Sandra, Brian and I have returned bearing a back of food.” Dad said holding a McDonald’s bag.

“Yummy and an ice cream cone too. I love you guys, thanks.” I said very appreciative of the food and ice cream. “What did you talk about while out.”

“Not much.” Brian said while fidgeting, I guess I’ll have to ask him later when we are alone, and I know just the trick to get him to talk.

“Here’s your food, enjoy.” Dad said as he handed me the bag, I opened it and found my favorite nuggets with sweet and sour sauce and fries. We all ate quietly until we were done eating. I gobbled down the last of the nine piece and last fry just as a very tall balding man knocked on the door to the room I was in. Dad got up and asked if he could help the man, he introduced himself as Mr. Chambers.

“Sandra this is Mr. Chambers, and he would like to talk to us about what happened today.” Dad said as he led the very muscular man into the room. I felt overwhelmed by his stature; he defiantly towers over the smaller Kevin.

“Good afternoon Sandra, my name is Brad Chambers, and I would like to first off apologize for my son’s actions against you today. He had no right or reason to do what he did. He will be held accountable for his actions which is why I am here today. I wanted to discuss with you, options other than having him arrested. He is a good boy; it’s just he has had problems relating to other kids his age. And if what I have in mind is ok with you, I think it might even help him become a better man.” Mr. Chambers said in a very soft spoken tone, he really seemed different sounding than he looked, very educated and caring.

“What do you have in mind Mr. Chambers?” I asked very curious.

“First of all Kevin will be required to apologize to you personally and in front of the whole tenth grade. I have also decided he needs to learn what it’s like to be perceived as he put it, ‘An outcast and a freak.’ His punishment will be to dress completely as a girl for fourteen days starting Monday. That way he will experience some of the things you might be going through. I can only imagine what it might be like but I have a great respect for you and Kevin needs to learn that and how to treat those around him.” Mr. Chambers was direct and to the point. “How do you feel about that Sandra?”

“I’m unsure of what to think, I do appreciate the respect you have shown me but I don’t know if this will work. What if he tries to injure me again?” I asked for assurance Kevin would not hurt me again.

“Don’t worry about that Sandy; I’ve got your back.” Brian said with a big smile and acting tough.

“I will guarantee that if you tell me that Kevin hurts you or anyone else he will be arrested for this action. In fact I’ll give you my cell number and you can get in touch with me at anytime you feel I need to be informed of any actions he takes.” Mr. Chambers said with conviction.

“I think I can live with that., I thank you for coming and apologizing to me personally Mr. Chambers.” I said honestly.

“You are very welcome Sandra, all my best to you and your father. Don’t forget to call.”

“I won’t Mr. Chambers.” With that Mr. Cambers handed me his business card and left. I then turned to Brian and dad. “What do you guys think about this?”

“I think it’s a hoot and great karma, I can’t wait to see Kevin at school trying to hide behind girls clothes.” Brian said with laughter.

“You two need to tread lightly on this subject. If Kevin gets picked on at school, who’s to tell anyone they can’t pick on you for the same reason Sandra, and even you Brian. You are dating and some might consider you gay for dating Sandra, even if she is a girl on the inside. Some might not see it that way, and if they see you two in on the fun of what will happen at school with Kevin. Then they will see you as a bully also and open for payback.” Dad said sternly.

When dad put it that way I had no choice but to agree. I would certainly not partake in any bullying or teasing when I saw Kevin next. I hope Brian feels the same way.

“Your right Mr. Davidson, Sandra we have to be careful and not in any way tease Kevin. I will still protect you if he becomes violent.”

“I was thinking the same thing Brian, it’s a good thing you and I think alike. If you didn’t then I would dump you.” I put that last part in just to put Brian in his place.

“Well you are my princess after all. I will only follow your lead my liege.” Brian said with a bow for emphasis.

“You’re such a kiss ass Brian.” I said then hit him on the shoulder.

“That’s quite enough you two, or I’ll have to ground you both. It’s getting late and visiting hours are almost over, so we will have to say our goodbyes and let Sandra get her rest.” Dad came over and gave me a hug and a kiss on the forehead. “I’ll see you in the morning sweetie, I’m stopping by on my way to work then I will pick you up on my way home.” He said smiling and patting me on the shoulder then looked at Brian. “Brian I will leave you and Sandy alone so you can say your goodbyes and then I’ll drive you home.”

“Thanks Mr. Davidson.” Brian said blushing.

“You’re welcome Brian, and please call me David.”

“Yes Mr. Da.… I mean David.” Brian corrected himself.

My dad then walked out and left us alone. I looked over at Brian and thought how much I love him. He saved me from being injured further, I had to thank him. “Brian I am truly thankful for helping me today. I didn’t mean to sound bossy earlier.” I said apologetically.

“Don’t worry about it. Your dad and I were only teasing you, besides I do think of you as my princess.”

“You’re a kiss ass Brian, come here.” I told him patting the spot on the bed next to me. Brian cautiously sat down, and I looked into his eyes, I realized right then I loved him more than anything. I then put my hand on his cheek and pulled him into a passionate kiss. I felt tingly all over, and was getting excited. He’s a good kisser, and I like what he’s doing with his tongue. I melted into him and let the kiss linger and for the first time in my life I let my hand fall to his lap and touched another penis. I could tell he was excited as I was even through the fabric. I had to cool down or I would make a mess, so I broke the kiss but still looked into his eyes and lost myself in them.

“I love you Brian.” I simply said.

“I love you too Sandra.” He said blushing but meant it. “That was fantastic; you think you might be ready for more?” He asked honestly and I could not blame him.

“Of that I am sure of Brian, I do want more, to be honest I’ve given it a lot of thought and I want to experience everything with you.” I told him sort of hesitant.

“You do? That’s great.” Brian said excitedly.

“Yes, I’ve soiled plenty of towels just fantasizing about it. If you know what I mean.” Shit, did I just tell him I was masturbating thinking about him, yep sure did, oops.

“I know exactly what you mean Sandra; I can’t wait to experience more with you. Maybe we can do more once the dance is over next Friday?” He said in a question. “Yes an after dance celebration dance just you and me alone.”

“That sounds great Brian, and I agree.” I was excited about it myself and wondered what it would be like. “It’s late and I wish you didn’t have to go, but the orderlies will kick you out promptly at 8 o’clock.”

“I know and I hate leaving you here alone.” Brian said with sadness. “I’ll see you tomorrow ok?”

“Of course silly, I can’t wait to see you again, good night Brian.” I told him then kissed him again, but not as long as before.

“Good night my love, see you soon.” Brian said as he walked out then he blew me a kiss at the door. God I love that man, I thought to myself, and fell fast asleep as soon as my head hit the pillow.

I was woken up by a light tapping on my shoulder; I opened my eyes to see my dad standing over me with a smile.

“Good morning sweetie, have a nice sleep?” Dad asked pleasantly.

“Good morning dad, yes I slept well enough. My neck is kind of sore though but I feel better today.”

“Well that’s great honey, how would you like to get out of here?” Dad asked.

“Go home, absolutely. But I thought the doctor wanted me to stay the whole day?”

“I just finished talking to him, he said that you’re doing well enough to go home and back to school tomorrow.”

“That’s great dad, what about work?” I asked hopping he would not get in trouble on my account.

“Don’t you go worrying about it? My boss John is very understanding and told me not to worry about missing work.” Dad said easing my fears.

“I won’t dad, so the doctor says I’m ok then?” I asked just to be sure.

“Yes Sandra your fine, we just have to come back on Monday to get the stitches out.”

“Well I’m glad about that, let’s go home.”

Dad handed me a bag with some clothes in it. A simple yellow shirt and jeans and clean panties bra. I guess he’s a simple man. I dressed and soon dad and I were on our way home. It was a quite ride home. I just kind of zoned out and gazed at the passing buildings and passersby. I guess I wasn’t really in the talkative mood at the moment, which is almost a miracle for a teen aged girl. I then remembered about the dance and what Brian had said. I began to wonder what dad would think if I asked him about it.

“Dad, Brian asked me to the spring dance and I said yes, is that ok.” I asked a little red faced.

“Yes of course its ok, I expected that he would.” He said with a smile.

“Thanks, there is another thing I wanted to talk to you about, and it’s a hard subject for me to talk to you about.” I said a little slowly trying to get it all out.

“You can tell me anything Sandra, no matter what it’s about. I am here for you.” Dad said patting my knee and then turned into our driveway. “How about we get something to drink and sit and talk?”

“Ok.” I had not realized we were that close to home, I followed dad into the house. “I’ll have some iced tea please.” I asked as he opened the refrigerator.

“That sounds good, I’ll have one too.” Dad said and grabbed the container and two glasses from the cupboard and handed me a glass then poured it for me then poured himself one. We then took our drinks into the living room and sat down.

“So what would you like to talk about Sandy?” Dad asked with no concern as he looked to know what I would be asking.

“It’s about Brian and me. It…It’s.” I stumbled a bit. “I’ve been thinking a lot about being with Brian more intimately.” If my face was not red before, it sure was now.

“You mean sleeping together?” Dad said without a change of expression, little or no surprise. I was stunned to say the least.

“Yes.” I squeaked out. “You don’t mind?”

“What you and Brian do in private is your business. I just want you to be sure that this is what you want. I knew right away that your mother was the one for me. And I’m sure you feel the same way about Brian, am I right?” Dad asked with a smile.

“Yes, I love him more than anyone. I just now realized my feelings for him were deeper than I thought. I always thought I wasn’t gay. Now all I can think about is being with Brian.” I said not sure if what I said made any sense.

“Labeling yourself as anything is to early Sandra, whether you’re straight, gay, transgendered or somewhere in-between does not matter to me. I will still love you unconditionally.”

“Thanks dad, I love you.”

“I love you too sweetheart.” He then gave me a big hug then released me a few minutes later. “Let’s sit back down and finish our chat shall we.”

“Ok.” Dad and I talked for hours, mostly about school, Brian, the Spring Dance and of course he asked me again about Kevin and his punishment. I won’t bore you with all the details. It was a wonderful afternoon that I got and bonded closer to my dad. I have to say I felt much better after I talked to him about my feelings about my identity and not knowing which road I would ultimately take. He just sat and listened to me go on and on. He knew exactly when to interject with an idea or suggestion. He also told me not to stop questioning the world and my decisions. It’s the adult thing to do to look at the issues we are face with from multiple angles. For that I love and cherish my dad.

After our long talk dad asked if I would like to go out and get something to eat later. I said yes, and at that very moment there was a knock at the door. I went and opened it and standing there was Brian.

“Hi Sandra, I’ve missed you.” Brian said then gave me a hug. I’m beginning to love hugging him. He felt so warm and I could not help but melt into him. I looked into his deep brown eyes and kissed him.

“Hi yourself.” I said after breaking the kiss.

It took Brian a second to get his composure back. “I’m glad you’re out of the hospital.”

“Me too. Brian, would you like to come in?”

“Yes Please?” Brian said politely.

Brian and I sat and began talking. Dad excused himself and let us be. It was nice of him to give us space, even after I told him I had these feelings about Brian. The more we talked the more I felt at ease with him, Brian is such a good friend and I must be truthful, he’s very attractive too. We must have talked for hours about school. The biggest thing Brian had said had happened that the other students were all coming together in support for me. I could not believe that was happening, Brian explained that Kevin had spread rumors about me around school before he had hit me. No one believed him, and if they did no one seemed to care. I guess I will find out tomorrow when I get back to school.

It must have gotten late because dad came out and asked if Brian and I would like something to eat. We both said yes, and the three of us went out to dinner at Outback. It was a very nice and quiet dinner. I knew Brian and I both enjoyed the time with dad. I asked him if it would be ok if we go to dinner with his mother some time. He agreed and said Saturday would be perfect.

We soon found ourselves once again staring at each other on my porch waiting for the other to say good night. I took the lead and kissed him good night. It was another great kiss that once again led me to think about spending time ‘Alone’ with him. I don’t think I will be able to wait any longer, if I do I might explode in anticipation. I asked god for patience and went into the house and went to bed as I was tired.


 
To Be Continued...

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Perfect Answer

To the crime!

    Stanman
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    Stanman
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Your Writing Style has Improved

very much Sara! I still see some grammar mistakes sprinkled here and there but far far fewer than before =^.^= You are closer in character depth and voice and you are starting to move your plot very efficiently. You can PM me and I can converse with you over specifics, but overall You are a much better author now than when you began writing A Prayer Answered.

Sephrena Lynn Miller
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Yes I agree Sephrena,

Most of the errors I believe are typos!

Sara is becoming of age as an author, I'm sure you have been an inspiration.

An enjoyable story Sara.

Thankyou

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Rita

Age is an issue of mind over matter.
If you don't mind, it doesn't matter!
(Mark Twain)

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Oh My, what a wonderful way

Oh My, what a wonderful way to teach Kevin a real lesson and it is coming from his own Father. I do agree with the suggestion that Brian and Sandra remain quiet when around Kevin so they don't get tagged with also being bullies. Way cool. J-Lynn