Spectacle (2)

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Part Two:
Spectacle.

To be continued...

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" What are you doing, young lady ? "

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, . . more like , " what have you been doing with this magnificent gifting ?" Thank you for finally sharing. This is World-Class Fantasy. More, . . more, . . please !! jjc

johncorc1

Intoxicating

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Beautifully written. Like the cancan story I was completely drawn into the narrative as if I was watching a film or was actually there. You have a very rich use of language and expression that is quite intoxicating. I haven’t commented on the other chapters including the third an last but this is how I feel about the whole story. I wanted to finish it before commenting and this seemed to be a good place to do that.

Thank you
Glenda

Glenda Ericsson

Thanks very much :)

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Thanks very much, Glenda.

I was completely drawn into the narrative as if I was watching a film or was actually there.

That's the highest compliment I could hope for. My intention was to take the reader deep inside the story, perhaps even allow them to experience what Bianca/Benny was feeling.

You have a very rich use of language and expression that is quite intoxicating.

I often worry that I employ too much hyperbole and purple prose, but perhaps I found a 'happy medium' on this occasion. Thanks once again, I'm very glad you enjoyed the story so much.

Tracy.

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