Setting: The Rule of Three Senses

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On alternate Wednesdays, I run a little writers' group sharing insights and critiques with other writers. I'm the most experienced there, though not the only one who has made a living as a writer, so often I am leading the discussions and providing some of the things I have learned.

The group is called "Taking Pains" as a reminder that being a writer is a craft that requires attention to detail, and too, an ability to stand up to constructive criticism. Which we try to do a lot of, and as little of the other kind as can be managed.

One of the things that comes up in our discussions repeatedly is how to manage setting, and why setting is important.

Setting can mean several things but the importance comes from using setting to bring readers into your story. If they can feel present in your scenes, the stories gain reality and what happens to the characters has more meaning.

So, how to make your readers part of the story? How to make them feel they are really there?

Old style fiction, think of people like George Eliot or Nathaniel Hawthorne, might spend pages on descriptions of the scenery. Why? Because readers, for the most part, had very little experience of a reality different from their own. And even familiar environments had few representations in the culture. Readers needed lots of help.

Now we have tons of literature, movies, tv shows, interactive video games, and so lots of vicarious experiences for readers to draw on to help them inhabit the stories you are telling. Unless you are writing fantasy or science fiction of one of the wilder kinds, you don't need to over-describe your scenes.

Still the reader needs some assistance. But you don't want to spend too much time on it, not too many words. You want to get on with the story you are telling, and frankly, the reader wants you to get one with it too.

Okay, how to do that economically and effectively? This is where I came up with my Rule of Three.

If you want the scene to feel real, you have to use three senses in describing it.

The rain came down in curtains of chilly mist, first obscuring my view of the city lights, then parting to reveal some gritty detail I had previously missed: the garbage cans standing on the corner like disheveled schoolboys waiting for the bus, their hats on crooked and their hands in their pockets.

One sentence and I got three senses into it. Visual of course, this one is almost always used, but thermal with the use of "chilly" and tactile with "gritty." Gritty may be metaphorical in that construction but it counts.

He ran heavily along the beach, his bare feet making soft imprints in the wet sand with each thud, the muttering waves erasing the evidence of his passage almost as quickly as it happened, his breath beginning to come in raspy pants and painful wheezes.

You don't want to get too "purple" with this sort of thing so try to avoid too many adverbs or adjective chains.

I watched her scratch out the hopscotch pattern on the sidewalk with the dry yellow chalk gripped in her pudgy fingers, her tongue appearing now and then at the corner of her mouth to help with making the numbers inside the boxes.

If you can get the knack of doing this, burying the scene-setting into the action, your writing will feel dense and evocative.

Hugs,
Erin

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Fragrant Omission

If you're going to make sense of it you need to raise a little stink.

Jill

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Imagination and Immersion

BarbieLee's picture

Writers who write fiction need imagination. Playwrights can visualize the play before it is ever performed. Movie directors are the same. They aren't in the here and now, they are in the there time and place. Artists and sculptures see the finished painting, the artwork before it begins from a plain canvas or a piece of stone.
I could go on and and on mentioning the architects, the builders, the astrophysicists, etc.They all need two things more than anything else to be good or exceptional at what they do. Imagination and then visualize it (immersion) before they start. Things may change as they adapt as they write, paint, or do things others can't see until it's brought to a finished product.
Erin is right as descriptive must be able to take the reader to or close to the same scene the writer sees in his or her mind. And then add action if one isn't describing a static scene. Erin did both in her rain and hopscotch. Dialog if you aren't writing a dictionary or history book. Your actors and or actresses need to give the writer a feeling they are there listing to every voice, every sound or you just wrote a silent movie and the reader can play music in the background while they read to make it a true silent story.

There are so many exceptional writers on BCTS I'm blown away by all the talent here. I pray those who are reading all these great stories are drawn into the fire of passion those writers put into their stories and learn to do the same. The difference is, what your English teachers taught from a text book (instruction manual) and being in a Work Shop watching and learning as the masters turn out finished pieces of art.

Thank you to Erin and all the girls who make BCTS available to everyone, readers and writers. Where we not only find stories of all kinds but friends who offer help to their fellow writers and readers. I pray all of you understand what an exceptional opportunity you have in front of you to not only read great stories but to learn from those I believe are some of the best writers ever born.
always
Barb
Life is meant to be lived, not worn until it's worn out.

Oklahoma born and raised cowgirl

It was a dark and stormy night... :)

Sorry. I couldn't stop myself.

If I ever try to write a story, which will almost certainly never happen, I'll keep your advice in mind. The examples you provided do create clear images in my mind of the setting.

Well

Andrea Lena's picture

I spent most of my life feeling like a disheveled schoolboy. Does that count?

  

To be alive is to be vulnerable. Madeleine L'Engle
Love, Andrea Lena

If

Daphne Xu's picture

If you can describe it.

-- Daphne Xu