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You know like the Christmas Carol story renoun,'Scrooge'! Remember the three spirits ,his back from the dead business partner § the first to visit before bedtime? The three spirits of Christmas pastΔ, presentâ„—, and futureΩ.

As I live I know death and I know life ,I know both as one and the other, I know them. Its a horrable thing when your called to die and you can't escape it. You don't remember anything about the instruction given before going to earth or even your family in heaven.

All you know is that a supernatural knowledge has you going to die soon. You can't run or hide or plead to anyone you know.
Your scared so you go forward hopping upon hope you get a repreave from death like Ebanezer did.

Now Patricia spirit the second one left her memories with the number three spirit. The third spirit told me of her memory when she was but a teenager or nearing the twenties. She told it as a dream she had but the truth is as she experienced the vission it was. She was amazed and over time she allowed herself to believe the vission but a dream.

In it God tells her in the awaken state that one day at the end of this century or close because He would not specify, she would become completely different. She would become a whole new and different person than she is now. Yes He told her she would become completely opposite to what she is now. She would die and a new completely different person would emerge in her place. She repeated His words to be clear she heard Him correctly. She ask him well will it hurt? Much? He told her no you won't feel a thing. She said are you sure? He told her I will be with you to carry you. She said change? Really change? He told her Yes and said don't think about it to much because you are going to forget it for sometime.

Eventually it will float into your mind a dream knowing knowledge. One you believe a dream but cannot escape it either. When the time comes I will tap your shoulder to Remember it.

Now Patricia second spirit exited her body in december 7, 1982 and she was around 25 years old. She remembered knowing it would hurt in the vission but knew God was not lieing either.

Although at the time she did not know that seven years later after the vission she would be carried to Heaven from a military hospital december 7, 1982.

Now the third spirit in the Patricia body was telling me in 2007, this with the memories of her own from suffering the experience of the vission that she lived out ,that same vission told from God to the exited second spirit of the Patricia body in december 7, 1982.

The third spirit of the Patricia body suffered the vission beginning in 1999 and ending in 2004. The third spirit was sharring the Patricia body with Patrick:
> >>   >>   >>   About the twin
>> thought: yeah
>> >>   because I could
>> >>   >>   see one of the
>> >>   >>   >>   reasons they monitored
>> me 2003 to
>> >>   2004 or 5.
>> >>   >>   The body and
>> >>   >>   >>   mind were not only
>> changing from
>> >>   fe to male
>> >>   >>   but (which by
>> >>   >>   >>   the way trish is gone
>> completely
>> >>   now)fe and
>> >>   >>   male were
>> >>   >>   >>   sharring not just the
>> body but
>> >>   the mind at
>> >>   >>   the time! Growing
>> >>   >>   >>   up the fe and the
>> male(me) shared
>> >>   the body
>> >>   >>   and mind but not
>> >>   >>   >>   at the sametime. (I
>> don't
>> >>   recall). So I was
>> >>   >>   going from her
>> >>   >>   >>   to me(him) back and
>> forth. Kinda
>> >>   like one
>> >>   >>   was fighting the
>> >>   >>   >>   other for dominance
>> from the womb
>> >>   even! No
>> >>   >>   wonder I was so
>> >>   >>   >>   out to lunch all the
>> time with my
>> >>   head in
>> >>   >>   the clouds growing
>> >>   >>   >>   up!

>> Lol trish went
>> >>   to the fed
>> >>   >>   for help in
>> >>   >>   >>   august 2003 due to our
>>body dieing. Not
>> >>   another
>> >>   >>   day could I have
>> >>   >>   >>   survive as a trish.
>> Already
>> >>   trish was
>> >>   >>   looking more and
>> >>   >>   >>   more a man! They were
>> scared,
>> >>   horrified, and
>> >>   >>   traumatized. For
>> >>   >>   >>   her to end up in the
>> emergency
>> >>   ward at the VA.
We were an inch
>> >>   >>   >>   away from death. No
>> one could
>> >>   help me and trish
>> >>   >>   had nowhere else
>> >>   >>   >>   to turn. When we got
>> there they
>> >>   were waiting
>> >>   >>   for us and we got
>> >>   >>   >>   help and knowledge to.
>> So did
>> >>   they and
>> >>   >>   together we have been
>> >>   >>   >>   learning. Well see
>> when trish went to
>> >>   the fed
>> >>   >>   trish memories tell me that she was going
>> >>   >>   >>   inside and I patrick
>> was
>> >>   emerging. Well when
>> >>   >>   this was
>> >>   >>   >>   happening trish took
>> it from 2002
>> >>   til aug
>> >>   >>   2003 because the
>> >>   >>   >>   pain was very intense. Now pre history that for a moment as trish was beginning menopause like symptoms emotionally at first only say starting around 1999. She was suffering emotional breaking and was at a loss for help. She instinctively refused any doctor for help for why she did not know. Now to top it off life sucked and in december 13, 1999 she gets an incurable pnuemonia the VA tells her she should be dead! Now 2002 to 2003:
>> Like the
>> >>   movie kinda
>> >>   >>   where spock has enormous pain
>> >>   >>   >>   to go through puberty
>> again in
>> >>   Genesis film.
>> >>   >>   Trish did not   get help and was
>> horrified but
>> >>   knew just
>> >>   >>   enough that no
>> >>   >>   >>   doctor could help her.
>> She
>> >>   instinctively
>> >>   >>   protected me but
>> >>   >>   >>   was confussed as to
>> what was  
>> >>   happening to
>> >>   >>   her. All the
>> >>   >>   >>   while she did not know the pain was her female reproductive organs disintigrating and my male reproductive organs were comming to take their place. Her family and
>> friends are
>> >>   seeing
>> >>   >>   her looking
>> >>   >>   >>   like a man more and
>> more. BINGO
>> >>   trish takes
>> >>   >>   us to the FED
>> >>   >>   >>   while she is still
>> dominant. She
>> >>   knows she
>> >>   >>   is expirring or
>> >>   >>   >>   disappearing but the pain feels like labour. The Fed
>> knows trish
>> >>   dna is xy
>> >>   >>   but told her
>> >>   >>   >>   they did not tell her
>> because
>> >>   they did not
>> >>   >>   want to mess up
>> >>   >>   >>   her life incase she
>> identified as
>> >>   a female!! And later asked to study her. She was in shock! She knew all her life and even had her secret name for him, Patrick. Later after 2004 I was well along into my puberty like 2008 at 13 or 14, I was told I was bi sexual with two sex set ups. They did not think I could handle knowing to soon. I admit it too. Trish memories don't know anything about that either other that in 2000 she felt like God was beginning stripping her identity off. Tarring off the old past and it hurt a lot!

Ok
spead up to 2005
when me and Paula meet. Well Paula did not know the quiet boy was sad. That he was rapidly continuing to grow in mind and body, a boy of ten years old. But she knew guys who looked twelve when they were 30 even and acted 3. She asked questions later in 2006 and the officials monitoring phenomina gave her answers on me. She went from acting wife to acting mother. By 2005
>> >>   I was the
>> >>   >>   dominant and
>> >>   >>   >>   trish was inside. I
>> became the
>> >>   intersex male
>> >>   >>   instead of
>> >>   >>   >>   trish being dominant
>> as the
>> >>   intersex female.
>> >>   >>   So the time was
>> >>   >>   >>   past that me and trish
>> used our
>> >>   mind and
>> >>   >>   body at the
>> >>   >>   >>   sametime from 2003 to 2004. One of us while in the consciousness and the other in the sub conscious kinda floating above the body. By 2005 I was
intersex male and she my   life memories.
I suffered her gone as a loss and I
morned her passing for   3 years.

When me patrick came into
being my consciousness in the body was in 2004 or the end of 2003 somewhere in that time. I left this body as a child of say 9 because my body was actively male. People were forcing me to be a girl so I ask Him and He did. Now in 2003 Patricia spoke and I said only to her and she took us where she knew to go. I had no knowledge of this 2003 as I had memories of 1965. I depended on her so I spent mostly in our subconscious than.

She left our body at the end of 2004 when I was getting the enjoyment of a kid ten years old living life with new fun. By the time I notice she was gone I was thinking she was comming back. When I got tired of waiting and reality set in I was very sad.
She told me from her memories how she learned during early 2004 from doctors about what was happening in the body. She knew than Yahs vission had unfolded, there was a tap on her shoulder.

It was later in 2007 when trish told me about her vission from Yah, around 1973. I was in awe of it and told Paula later. Since 2006 trish has shared her memories with me of our past so I would know my history from december 12, 1964 to december 12, 2004. But I don't feel an emotion connection from beyond 1965 until august 2003. 2005 was my first year on my very own ever. I have my own memories from than til now 2009 and if Yah says than beyond.

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Spend a little more time

Patrick, I'm going to recommend that you spend some more time reviewing your work before posting it. You've got a ton of typo, grammar, and spelling issues in this short piece... as well as some unusual formatting in sections. While some of these sorts of things can be skipped over in the pursuit of time or in looking to experiment with new ideas, there are so many at the moment that it makes it very hard to follow what you're trying to do.

As to what you are doing... I can see that you're working with some interesting ideas about non-sequential time that could make for a rather original story. Unfortunately, you need to ensure that each perspective is clear even when that perspective shows confusion or chaos. Otherwise your reader will never be able to track what is happening. Or to put it another way... your gimmick by itself is not enough to carry the story and it actually conflicts with telling the story; that means you're going to have to work twice as hard (if not more) to tell it if you use this gimmick.

Finally, partly due to the previous issues; you don't really have a significant rise in tension or the resultant resolution that comes easily in a traditional story format. This makes it that much more important that you introduce such elements through out the piece (not all works are Aristotelian in format but you still have to have conflict to drive action). Without it, you end up with the whole story reading at roughly the same level and coming across like a series of facts/statements, which is very dry and uninteresting.