What Transpires at Night (Part 1)

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Undercover, trying to catch a serial killer, Detective Wayne Reeves encounters something more than he was expecting.

 
Picture credits: The pic is from the "Bloodrayne" video game series and all credit goes to the owners: Majesco and Terminal Reality. This is "not" a Bloodrayne fanfic. She's just hot and that's who I envision the lead character to look like.

Author's note and only warning: This is a vampire story. This equates to blood and sometimes violence. If this squicks you then you might want to find something else more to your taste. I even put the little "Caution" tag on, so proceed as you will.


 
Part One
 
 
His touch set fire to my very skin. Even if I wanted to I knew that I wouldn't hold anything back from the man that chose me this evening. We danced forever at Club 216, writhing against one another, oozing sex on the crowded floor until neither of us could withstand our mutual teasing. He drove us to the Clairemont Hotel off of Louisiana Boulevard.

With my hand in his we entered the front of the hotel while a valet parked the sporty BMW. My face was flushed and my nipples hard when he pulled me into the elevator and we ascended to the twenty-seventh floor. His lips were cool against mine, but the taste of him sent more than chills running through me.

My mind was lost into a sexual fever like I had never known, lowering any of my standard inhibitions. I would do anything for him at that moment. Any base desire he held, any fetish, the worst of depravities were his to ask of me.

I arched into him as he caressed my breast and fondled my rounded hip. Little noises were mewed from my throat no matter where he chose to lay his mouth. It was like sparks of pure eroticism he delivered directly from his mouth, coursing along my skin.

I hadn't even realized that we were already in the bedroom and my dress was unzipped before I came to my senses even a little bit.

'What the hell am I doing?' I thought franticly.

He was behind me when he slid the dress down my arms. Holding on to my clutch purse for dear life, my breath shot out of me as he tossed me on the bed. I wanted to scramble away but my body wouldn't respond. Feeling his cool hands on my lower back and the movement of the bed, I knew he was nearing his goal.

My g-string was ripped away with ease and my legs spread as my face was pushed into the pillows and my head tugged to one side. God yes! But my tune changed when twin jolts of pain lanced through my neck. All awareness returned to me and what was happening. I was going to die, just like all the others.

I arched up and tried to pull away, but his strength was incredible as he sucked at my neck. His hand wrapped around my face as he struggled to enter me from behind. I yelled, screaming into his palm. It was nothing but the muffled struggles of the useless, and could easily be mistaken for cries of ecstasy.

It was then that he had found an unguarded hole and entered. I froze up, in total shock, the pain was unbearable for that was all there was. My life, my death would end in insufferable pain, drained from me.

His hand eased along with my resistance and I took the only advantage I had at the moment, turning my head and sinking my own teeth into his wrist. I felt a tearing at my throat, worse than before. It made me bite harder in reaction, ripping through flesh, tendon, and sinew. Blood gushed into my mouth as I tore deeper through to the bone. I got one measure of revenge for my death. I wouldn't let go of him, but my mouth was filled of his blood, so I swallowed.

My killer jumped back, withdrawing from me in shock, tearing his arm away from my mouth.

I heard the gurgling of my blood in his throat as he spoke in panic. "No…"

He tumbled off the bed as I gathered the last of my energy and snapped open my clutch. My eyes were growing heavy and the last of my adrenaline aided strength started waning away. I rolled and raised my hand slightly aiming my .45 Chief's Special.

"What have you done?" he spat as my blood spilled from his lips and down the smooth skin of his chest. His eyes dropped between my legs to see evidence of my maleness, then they widened.

That's when I pulled the trigger and saw his heart explode out of his back along the wall.

~O~

The burning was my life. I couldn't remember a time when there wasn't pain. My bones exploded, shards shooting through my muscles and skin. My insides melted from the intense heat. I could almost imagine them turning to the white hot magma that was obviously now a part of me. My senses were closed. I couldn't perceive of anything except my perfect sight. The times that I could keep my eyes opened I saw my brothers in blue scrambling around the room.

Next were the clueless rantings of people in green scrubs. Somewhere deep in my insanity I knew they were trying to help me, but there was nothing to help. I could only lash out at my invisible attackers, the ones that were reaching inside me, changing me, pulling everything out of me that was normal and good, replacing it with vileness and evil.

God, please let me die!

Darkness

~O~

"Wayne."

Everything sounded different: the air rushing through the conditioning vents, the buzzing of an errant fly, and the mechanical taste of Elliot Jameson's voice.

My thoughts were almost chaotic, but most of all of them wondered what was wrong with my partner.

"Wayne."

My eyes snapped opened and searched the sterile white room. I didn't really have any freedom of movement and knew I had been restrained. Instinct took over and I struggled at my bonds.

"Wayne, calm down, it's me Elliot! Jesus!"

I tried calling out to my partner, but almost choked at something lodged in my throat. Something was trailing up my nose and down into my throat, and it irritated me to no end. Putting everything I had into my arms I ripped free of the restraint and grabbed at my face.

"Wayne, calm the fuck down!"

I heard him, but couldn't take whatever was that they had done to me.

A tube taped down. I ripped at it and grabbed hold, pulling it away. I felt it sliding up and out of me the more I pulled. Eventually it fell, dropped away and I gagged.

My legs seemed to be stronger and tore away the remaining restraints as I fell off the bed. The abrupt stop on the floor didn't hurt as much as it should have. Arms and legs went off at their own accord as I half crawled to the corner and made myself into as small of a target as I could.

The feeling of the wall at my back quieted some of the panic that was jumping around in my head. My hands covered my head and entwined in my hair. With my knees drawn up I felt almost safe.

"Wayne, buddy. Can you understand me?" A pause for a moment. "Doc, is this fucking thing on?"

Some part of Elliot's voice made it into my head.

"El?" I croaked.

Another pause. "Wayne. You're really freaking me out here, man. You need to snap out of it."

The first real thing I noticed was my hair. That's what snapped me out of my stupor. I leaned my head back and pulled a strand of it outward. The length alone was weird. For the mission I had cropped it really short for the real-hair wig. An additional weird thing was that I could feel the tugging directly from my scalp.

I had apparently been unconscious so long that my hair had grown out well past my chin. Struggling to open my eyes once more I made note that it was a different color as well, almost a metallic dark orange-red. I could feel my face had gone to disbelief. What the hell? I had brown hair, mousey brown hair at that.

That's when I noticed my hands. The extended nails, the thin fingers, which led to the thin arms with only a dusting of almost invisible hair on top of my forearms.

I dropped my legs to the floor. They stuck out trim and smooth from underneath the hospital smock. They were not my legs… they were not even male legs.

Then the last thing that came into view were the pair of swells underneath the smock. I was in denial. There was no way…. My hands went to them and felt them. They were real, they were mine.

I was going to grab between my legs, but I stopped myself. I didn't want to know. 'God, please, I don't want to know.'

"Wayne, you there buddy?"

A disbelieving giggle worked its way up my throat and out into the room. Again, not my own; higher pitched.

"El, what the fuck?"

I looked up and I saw a clear window, an observation window against the far wall. The hospital bed was between it and me.

"Man, you got to keep it together. Some serious shit went down and… Jesus, Wayne."

I took a deep breath and let it out, trying my best to keep calm. I needed answers.

"Hey, buddy? You think you can stand up so we can see you? The bed's blocking the way."

I nodded, not even thinking if Elliot could see my answer. Setting my hand on the floor I got my legs under me and pushed up, sliding my back along the wall. My legs were surprisingly steady. That's when I saw movement from behind the glass.

There was Elliot and a few white coats, doctors obviously. What I wasn't expecting were the pair of SWAT extras heavily armed and looking like they really wanted to shoot me.

"What happened?" I asked. "Why the hell am I a chick?"

Surprisingly enough I received an answer. "Man, you changed." I found Elliot's eyes and my vision sharpened on him. "We got you out of the room and to the hospital. You were screaming your ass off and nothing they were shooting into you even slowed you down."

The pain. I remembered.

"Then you went down. Dropped like a rag doll… and then that happened."

I stepped to the side. There was a slight reflection off the glass which I approached in disbelief.

"Wayne, stop!"

My vision cleared and I saw the SWAT guys looking decidedly nervous, with large caliber weapons trained on me. "What?"

"You gotta keep cool, man. Do you remember anything from the Emergency Room?"

I shook my head. "Only the pain."

Elliot looked down and then back up at me. "You tore apart the doctors. Ripped their throats out."

Everything went still. "Blood."

Elliot nodded. "They figured that out. Once you passed out they tried sticking an IV in you, but it wouldn't work."

I spun around and looked at the bag hanging from the IV stand. In fact there were several bags hanging there. All of it was leading to one tube which they had shoved down my throat. That's what I had pulled out. They were feeding me blood.

My childhood was finally catching up to me. All the movies, and books I had read. The Ripper biting my neck, the sexuality he oozed, me biting his wrist and swallowing his blood and now the doctors feeding me the stuff. It all led to one seriously messed up conclusion. I was a vampire. I was a chick, and I was a vampire.

~O~

After the third day of being holed up in the room with only one observation window I was seriously starting to go stir crazy.

I was in control now. I hadn't spazzed since that first night. Elliot had talked me into sanity. Made me believe and remember what had happened.

We were, and I guess still are, cops. I was undercover. Being the only guy in the department that, given the right disguise, could pass for a hot chick. After the fifth murder, Elliot and I were brought onto the case. The vics were all the same. About 5'8 in height, blonde hair (dyed or not didn't make a difference), trim, and loved to dance. They were all found dead, with their throat cut out, and their insides decorating the room. The perp had serious anger issues.

So we baited the trap with me. I went out dancing for four solid weeks, every night, different clubs. Then last night came along and I met him.

I had no idea why in the hell I lusted after the guy. I was a straight arrow in the sex department, chicks only for me. But he had me wanting him from the moment I met his eyes. I would have let him fuck the shit out of me if he wanted to. Something about that is just so wrong.

Well, you know what happened next. Blood, death, sex change.

But what I want to know is what the hell is it with the freaking sex change?

I get the 'me being a vampire' thing. It's weird as hell, but I get it. I mean he sucked my blood, I drank his. That's how it works in all the books… okay, most of the books. Why do I have tits now? And yes, my dick is gone too. I checked later that night when they left me mostly alone. I'm a chick.

From what I know, and can tell by the wall clock in the observation lounge, is that I sleep about two hours a day whether I want to or not. Twelve till two in the afternoon. I drank blood, I didn't use the toilet and I never seemed to suffer from B.O. The doctors won't tell me jack.

I spent most of the day in the corner of the room, where they couldn't really see me, staring at my body. Whatever changed me, changed me right, or rather changed me to be a guy's wet dream. I didn't know about the 'right' of it.

My legs were graceful and muscular, but not in a weightlifter way, more of a dancer way. My hips had expanded plumping out my butt and they curved up to give me an overly trim waist. Girlish abs showed underneath, and that led to the B or C cup breasts. I couldn't tell proportions being as I had nothing to measure it to except for the door, the one exit from my prison.

I made a guess that I was about 5'6 to 5'8 in height if it was an average doorway. Apparently I had dropped a couple of inches. It was really aggravating to not even have a mirror so that I could see the full extent of my change. The most I could see was from a warped reflection in the observation window.

Now that kind of surprised me being that the old legends said that Vampires didn't cast a reflection, but I guess everything they said couldn't be right. I mean I obviously had a soul. I could still tell wrong from right and I had no desire to go on murderous rampages. I still had the same need to be a cop as I always had.

While I rambled away with my inner thoughts I heard the slat at the door open. It was kind of hard not to hear it. My senses, ever since the change, had increased five fold. I saw a bag being slid through. Breakfast time.

I was still putting away the blood, at least five pints a day. It quenched my thirst and them some. I'm sure I could have survived on much less, but something about an inner need made me want more. So I was a blood glutton. It made me feel energized and healthier with each bag I took, and if I was to ever get the chance to get out of here I needed all the advantages I could have.

I got up from my squat in the corner and moved across the room. I could almost smell the blood from the bag. It was sealed in its original container. They never let me have a mug. Since I had the teeth to bite into the bag I really didn't care all that much. I mean it would have been nice to be able to act a little bit more human, but the truth of it was that I wasn't human anymore.

No, vampires don't have three inch needle sharp fangs like in the movies. Or at least I didn't. My canines were a little more extended and they were sharp, that's about it. I've seen worse from the kids in Goth clubs that had their teeth cosmetically filed to look all vampish.

The one annoying thing about eating was that the white coats all felt they had the need to watch me. I hated people watching me eat when I was human. I mostly just turned my back on them and sat on the bed until I was done.

What does blood taste like, you may ask? Well to me it was like having a T-Bone steak meal with all the trimmings. I was in heaven every time I sank my teeth into one of these bags. It only took me a few seconds to empty a bag. I remember shooting a twelve ounce beer slower than it took me to finish a sixteen ounce bag of O positive.

"Miss Reeves."

I flinched as I was licking the last drops off my lips. Whenever they wanted to get my attention they always called me 'Miss'. It was annoying as hell. They knew damn well I wasn't a 'Miss'.

I slid off the bed and dropped the empty bag in a small pail they provided for my non-existent toilet. Since I never used for it's intended purpose I use it as a trash can.

I relaxed my set jaw. It wouldn't do any good to get all up in arms about anything if I stood a chance of getting out of here anytime in the next decade. Play nice.

I turned and made my way to the observation window with a relaxed stroll.

One of the white coats stood there with only one SWAT guy as escort. I approached and stood in front of the doctor giving him an expectant look.

"How do you feel Miss Reeves?"

"Bored."

A small, and I mean a very small quirk of his lips let me know that the guy was somewhat human. Most doctors I know aren't.

"Feel like getting out of there and to more humane surroundings?"

Okay, he had my attention. "Doc, if it involves actual clothes, I'll sit up and bark for you."

There was that tiny quirk again. Damn, I think the guy has the hots for me or something. Two reactions in as many minutes.

"We're going to transfer you to a different facility. One suited to test your new body. There will, of course, be medical tests, blood and skin samples, various scans, and the like. Would you be open to cooperating?"

It didn't take me long to figure out where this was leading. "I've seen the movies. There's probably some super secret government agency that's heard about me and once you get done with your tests I'll be secret agent girl with matching spandex tights and flowing red cape. That about the sum of it, Doc?"

His lips separated slightly and there was a long pause. "I can probably get them to hold back on the tights and cape. Maybe something in black leather?"

A joke… holy shit! A burst of laugher erupted from my mouth. I had a sexy, throaty, laugh. Well I was a vampire, what did you expect?

"You'll have my cooperation as long as there is no dissection involved."

He was smiling at this point and placed a hand over his heart. "I promise. I'll have someone drop off some temporary clothing so that you can travel in comfort."

With that he flicked off the microphone and exited the room. A few minutes later a chick opened the door to room and I get my first view of the hallway and two SWAT guys standing guard.

The chick was carrying a paper bag and stopped at the end of the bed. "I … we got you some clothes.

I moved toward the bed. "Cool."

She started, like I was going to go jump on her neck or something, so I stopped.

"What?"

"Sorry."

I shrugged. "You try sitting around for three days in this get up and see if you don't get a little excited for some real clothes."

A small smile crept up on her face and she dug into the bag sliding over a package of underwear. I picked it up and took a look of the picture on the front of the pack. Panties. Sporty style.

And the hits keep comin'.

I sighed and tore open the package. After innately figuring out which side goes where (hey, it's underwear, how hard can it be?), I slid the… panties… on underneath the hospital smock.

It was a start.

Next was what I recognized as a sports bra. Don't be surprised I know what these things are; I take'um off of women all the time. Or else I did take them off of women. That might be a thing of the past now.

I glanced up at the lady. She didn't really look like she was going to turn around or anything. What is it with chicks and them watching each other undress. Is it a Lez thing or something?

I reach around and undid the really ultra-classy pink hospital smock and tossed it on the table. In case you are wondering, yeah she was checking me out, but there was nothing sexual about it. It was decidedly clinical, like she was studying a new microbe.

The sports bra took a little bit of figuring out, but I got it in the end. It was black with little pink and white lines going across one of my boobs. I closed my eyes and shook my head. I still wasn't really comfortable saying 'my' boobs.

Next was a pair of leggings, which gripped everything from my hip bones down. It was skin tight, again with pink and white going down the outside of the legs. I was lastly supplied with a pair of socks and running shoes.

I almost felt human. Get it?

Lastly she set a sport cover-up for if I got cold. I hadn't really thought about it, but I haven't been affected by temperature changes. Yet another weird vampire thing.

I looked down at my outfit giving it an eyebrow quirk. So much for the no spandex promise.

"It's just until we get your current measurements. Then we can get you some more appropriate clothes."

Well, I guess that makes sense. "So are we outta here or what?"

"Follow me, please."

I grabbed the cover up and on the way through the door I eyed the lust-eyed guards. "Get an eye full there boys?"

We moved down the hallway and from the antiseptic smell I could tell I was still in the hospital. Well, no surprise there, I suppose. A quick trip in an elevator and I was led out of some back door where a blacked out SUV was waiting for us underneath a shaded awning. I was showed to sit in the middle bench seat so that there was an armed guard in the back and the front, while the chick that gave me the clothes was beside me.

At first I didn't think anything of it, but it was still daylight outside. I knew from experience already that I didn't have to sleep in dirt, in a coffin. I could move around during the daylight, but I still didn't know if I would burst into flame or not in the true light of day.

We were under way when I offered to take the test. The sun was still pretty high in the sky so it wasn't coming through the windows. "Hey, can I crack the window for a sec?"

"Why?" the chick asked.

I pointed up. "In case you haven't noticed, it's daylight and I'm a vampire."

I could almost see the wheels turning in her head. "Mike, crack the window about three or four inches, please."

The sun was over my right shoulder so if I stuck my hand out I should be able to feel the full effects of the sun, being that I was on the left side of the SUV. I rubbed my fingers together. For some reason I had a mental flash of sticking my hand over a gas stove on full burn.

I reached up and slid my fingers through, palm up for just a second. Nothing happened and so I went a little further and stuck the whole hand out. You know that feeling when you are at the beach and you know that you've been out in the sun for way too long. Yeah, that.

I jerked my hand back in expecting to see smoke rising off of my palm, but it was clean and normal… well for this body anyway. I flexed the finger and turned it over, nothing.

"Cool."

"Okay, Mike."

The window moved back into a closed position.

"Nothing happen?"

I shrugged. "Kinda felt like I was getting a sunburn, but nothing I couldn't take.

Her eyebrows quirked in interest. "Hmm."

The rest of the drive was boring as all hell. No radio, no casual conversation. Every time I brought up the simplest of subjects I was given one or two word answers that didn't really say anything. But it was great seeing the world again.

~O~

The new facilities were just on the outside of town. It was big. The big plaque that hung on the outside walls indicated OTO. That's it. Rumor had it that it was some sort of think tank. I don't think anyone actually had a clue. I could see evidence of ECM's, sorry, Electronic Counter Measures, lining the walls. It's so every Tom, Dick, and Harry couldn't hold up a parabolic microphone, or other common listening device and hear what's going on past the outside wall. It was common enough in the Tech industry or around government agencies. See where I'm going with this? No? Okay, here's a hint: I'm not a computer, so what does that lead you to conclude?

The buildings, I noticed, were formed in one big gigantic circle and we drove right down the middle. Before encountering the first building the ground opened up in front of us and we dropped down a ramp into what I guessed was an underground parking lot.

"I'm guessing you don't get a lot of stolen cars around here?"

Sigh. I'm surrounded by people with no sense of humor. This is going to be a really dull experience. I can feel it.

~O~

I was led to very large, think gymnasium large, room. It had workout equipment of every conceivable type scattered all around, and a curtained off area to the side. There were five white coats waiting for me looking like I was a real life caveman thawed out of a local glacial flow or something.

"Miss Reeves, right this way."

One of the doctors moved well out of the way and came around to meet my escort. I could easily hear, "It's been fed, right?"

That brought me to a halt. I turned around and stared him down. "Is that an offer, Doc?"

A flush ran to his face. Clinically, I knew what it was. Capillaries in the face are overrun by blood due to an emotional response.

But something in my vampire makeup saw deeper. My eyes focused on his face and then to the neck. I could almost see the Jugular veins, and Carotid arteries pulsing faster and faster. It caused a reaction out of me. My mouth dried and that in turn made my teeth ache. Yeah, those teeth.

Closing my eyes, I turned away and resumed following the others. I could scent his fear, and it was only making my mouth drier and drier.

"Someone get him out of here."

I didn't realize who said that until I stopped. It was me.

"What? I'm sorry Miss Reeves. Get who…"

I opened my eyes and the doctor who greeted me almost jumped back. "Perkins, get a unit of blood, quickly!"

His eyes moved past me. "Reynolds, out, get out."

The doctor who pissed me off was almost pissing himself.

"Walk," I said. "Don't run."

I knew for some reason that if he ran that I would be compelled to follow, to hunt. His fear fed every desire I was feeling at the moment. All of my senses expanded. I could smell the pungent garlic that the female who escorted me had for lunch, and I was at least ten feet in front of her.

My eyes tracked to the two men that were furthest in the lead. They were lovers. Their scents were all over each other. The head doctor had recently been to the restroom. Urinal cake smell clung to him. Footsteps and boot falls sounded around me while I tried my best to control an instinct to fight and flee.

"Here!"

Perkins stood a good ten feet away from me and tossed the bagged blood at me. My hand whipped out and snatched the bag from the air and I whipped it to my mouth. My teeth sank through the plastic and I squeezed, shooting it into my mouth. Less than five seconds later it was empty and I was sucking on the holes I created, getting every last drop.
 


 

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This is my first time...

...with vampire stories, TG or not.

It think it's hot. I like it. Intense, almost feral.

/adds another Lilith gem to favorites.

PS: sooo....when do we get Casidhe back? ^_^

Another cherry popped!

Awww, I'm your first vampire story! Wow, it's an honor! I think the pic that I chose adds to the story. Gets you in the mood, so to speak so you can see her as I see her.

Casidhe will be next. I'm going to alternate the chapters so I don't get burned out of either anytime soon.

Thanks!!!

Lili

~Lili

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Oh joy

Alternating Casihde/Vamp. Lilith will be the death of me. At least it's an enjoyable death ^_^

Note: I'm changing my account name. At the time I registered here I used my spam-proof, anonymous address. Time to use my main one.

-Christelle

What transpires

I enjoyed this story very much and look forward to many more chapters.

ELIZA


ELIZA

TY!

Thank you, Eliza. Many more to come!

Lili

~Lili

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Interesting spin

On the vampire thing. Nice so far with no attempt to explain the sex change thing. Since this is first person we have a very intimate view of her but there is a lot we don't know. Did those doctors live? It sounds like they died but they were in an emergency room so there was a chance. Like what was already said this has a very feral tone to it. Humans are prey. The whole smelling fear and the desire to chase someone running added to all of that. Well done and presented so far. Gritty and dirty thick with scents and grime. PS: You are right! That is a great picture for this tale. I was interested in the movie but the reviews sucked so bad that not even I dared give it a chance. I did see the Dungeon Seige movie with Jason Statham. Don't have a clue why anyone would let that dude,Uwe Boll, make even more movies. Very sad.
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grover

TY!

Thank you very much. I'm going for a more gritty feel when she is away from the OTO. Not to worry about a few things. She'll find out a lot of stuff about herself at the OTO, but she'll find out what actually happened to her when she meets her first vampire. Wayne (since you don't know her fem name yet) won't be one of those 'fight the good fight' vampires. She's got a hidden dark side and it will seriously mess with her.

Regarding the Bloodrayne movie. Unless you are a mega fan of the game, as I was, then don't see it. Uwe Boll or whatever his name is directed it. He's considered, bar none, the worst director in Hollywood. Everything he touches winds up in the crapper. He had some really good actors in the first movie and a decent plot, but he made it all seem like it was film in someone's back yard with a camcorder. The second movie was better, but still sucked. And they are making a 3rd.

~Lili

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They are called TRANSPIRES!

 

anime.gif     Vampires that change other's physical sex when bitten. Great story idea and love how its going!

Sephrena Lynn Miller
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Maybe Trans-pires?

Maybe it ought to be Trans-pires? Yanno, with the hyphen? That might make it a little more easier to follow.

The idea was Val's I forgot to credit her at the start of this for the title credit. I'll make sure to do so in part 2.

Lili

~Lili

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Yeah.. was me sorta

that gave Lillith the idea. Sephrena sort of popped it out at me awhile back. So I guess credit her. That's where I got the name from for it from anyways.

~val

Okay

LOL, okay, cool. Now I know who to credit properly. (wink)

Lili

~Lili

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Did I miss it the first time?

"What transpires at night"..."transpires"..."trans-vampires"...

Color me slow :-P


-Christelle-

"Fun-loving geek-chick looking for someone who doesn't give a damn about her past"


-Christelle

"Fun-loving geek-chick who's addicted to sunlight!"

Poor Christelle

It's okay, baby. We all have days like that. The first time I heard it I did a "grooooannnn" But Val changed the title up and I thought it was groan-able enough but cool enough to stick in people's minds. Thus a title was born!

~Lili

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Vamping the vampire

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Hi Lili,

When I first saw that you had started a second story here, I thought, 'Oh no, what will happen to "Either do it...", but now after reading the beginning and ESPECIALLY after your promise to keep both stories running... WELL, I'm ECSTATIC!!!!

Sometimes Grover can be such a tedious person though. He has said all the great stuff I wanted to say, but couldn't remember long enough to be able to make it into this post anyway. So for my comments, just reread what Grover posted and add a few kudos at the end, for good measure. The vampire reaction to sunshine reminds me of the vampire movie with Kevin, um, the guy who played the lawyer in "A Few Good Men". In that vampire movie they also treated the whole vampirism as a virus.

Thanks for not listening to me shouting out my back door for you to quit this whole idea of starting a new story before finishing the other one. I can be quite loud when I want to be so I'm sure you probably heard me even though I'm in Winnipeg and you are, well, somewhere else. (The neighbours were very upset at you for making me yell so loud, I hope you feel badly about that. I'll pass along your apology as soon as I read it. If they will still speak to me and not call the police this time, I'm sure they will understand and not file charges against either of us.)

Thank again for a great read.

with love,

Hope

with love,

Hope

Once in a while I bare my soul, more often my soles bear me.

Second story blues.

No worries about "Do it right" being abandoned. I can't stand stories that leave me hanging in the middle. If that ever happens to me I'll make it quite clear that it is abandoned and see if anyone else wants to finish it. Or whatever. But that story is at the beginnings of being wrapped up (maybe 4 more chapters to go) so no worries.

Kevin Bacon is the name you are looking for. I think.

The Virus idea has been used in a number of stories, but I'll have to go ahead and tell you that isn't the reason. Neat, huh! They followed the traditional means (blood exchange) to create Vampire!Wayne, but there is a different reason for him turning into a her.

Send my apologies to the neighbors for my part in the spaz attack. (wink)

Lili

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Love Vampires. Love This Story!

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This is cool, so very cool ... and hot!

I think you captured the essence of vampires very well, and you had a killer opening scene. It reached out and grabbed me by the nipples and didn't let go for the whole chapter! *giggle*

Oh dear. I hope I'll be able to sleep later tonight. Phew!

I love the character, and that picture is awesome. I think I've seen it before but that doesn't matter. It works.

The last scene is great too. Reynolds ... what an idiot. Heh.

Thanks very much for this. Please keep it comin'. Please?

- Terry

TY!

I'm a Vampire fan from way back, so I know more than a little about all the legends to make this a fairly good tale. I promise not to let go of your nipples for too long of a time... LOL.

The picture is credited at the beginning as Bloodrayne from the video game. It is exactly how I picture the lead character in this story minus the big honking blades she carries with her. I'll be using more pics in the future to give you a good feel of what I'm seeing.

More will be coming soon!

Thanks!!!
Lili

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Hi Lili This is good!!!love

Hi Lili
This is good!!!love vampire stories and this is a very good one, Can't wait to see what happens when Wayne gets out i think it may be just a little gory!!!!
Great story can we have some more soon ....PLEASE...
Huggles Kirri

TY!

Thanks Kirri!

Thank "Twilight" and Stephine Meyers for writing the books and the release of the DVD recently which gave me the idea for this story.

Also Maggie Finson who wrote the first Trans-pire story that I read. "Peace Bringer" over on old BC.

Yes, it will become a little gory. But nothing out of the ordinary from most Vamp books. Hopefully it will be more gritty than gory, and a little erotic just to add some flavor!

Thanks for reading!!

Lili

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TY!

Thank you, Jennifer! More on the way!

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And you were worried about using this idea.

No need for that at all. Wayne is a good character especially with the predator among prey feel and aspect in this story. Good start with an opening that is sure to grab even more readers and not let go as they discover this one, by the way.

Also, thanks for the mention. *smile*

I'll be waiting for more of this one, you can bet on that.

No worries any more

Well once I found a number of stories along this sub-genre I relaxed a little.

AS of mentioning you: It says a lot about your writing that I remembered your story. I'm a very prolific reader and yours stood out in my memory. Not the exact title, but the storyline itself. Way to go you!

Thanks for reading Maggie!

Lili

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I'm a vampire

I don't know why, but I often identify myself with a vampire. I like the idea, even though I can't stand eating meat because it killed animals. You know, I'm vegetarian for this very reason. I like to think vampire eat fruits, but perhaps not all vampires :)

So, you guessed, perhaps, I liked your story, even if I don't see what could happen now that 'Miss' Reeves is locked up. Well, I guess things are still going to happen but except medical analysis, drinking (blood) and sleeping (two hours), I can't see. But I have faith that you'll come up with something very interesting.

By the way, there is a vampire tag you could add to your story :)
http://www.bigclosetr.us/topshelf/tg-other-keywords/vampires

Nice story, waiting for the next chapter (as usual).
Thanks
Mildred

Thanks!

Thanks for the Vampire tag. I must have missed it. Weird.

Oh, there is lots of stuff in store for our new girl. The second part will be learning about her abilities and feeling out the area, and her keepers, but we'll be getting out of OTO in Part 3 for sure. No worries.

Lili

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I can take 'em or leave 'em ...

... but the only vampire story I've even half read or seen as a film is Dracula. I've heard of Buffy but never seen it; is it even available in the UK? (no TV at home)

This amused me:

"I sighed and tore open the package. After innately figuring out which side goes where (hey, it's underwear, how hard can it be?), I slid the… panties… on underneath the hospital smock."

because there was a scurrilous rumour that the UK department store C&A labelled its knickers with the company logo at the front and back to aid identification by potential wearers. I'll leave you to work out which letter went where *blush*

I'm happy to read on and see what transpires. I'm guessing it's as cliché free as the rest ;)

Geoff

Shampoo bottle warning labels

I know that Buffy did play in the UK at one time. I assume it would be available on DVD if you have a video store that carries TV shows.

Nothing surprises me anymore in regards to instructions and warnings on anything. There was actually a shampoo company that put a warning label on their bottle that it was not to be used as a sexual aide. The bottle itself was about 10 inches long a couple wide and had a tapered end. (facepalm) My opinion... it does a good job thinning out the gene pool of idiots. Less warnings and instructions for me!

Cliches in this story... hmm, I'll try, but i think vampires is so well use in today's fiction that it will be next to impossible to avoid any cliches. I'll just try my best to make it entertaining. (wink)

Lili

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Buffy

Buffy is still showing in the UK but only on satellite and cable on the SciFi channel.

It was originally shown on Sky 1, who occasionally still show it, and then on channel 4. It was a massive hit.

The various series of Buffy and Angel are available on DVD and VHS - probably best to use ebay now rather than paying shop prices.

Amazing!

Wonderful writing, great pace, and I can't wait for the next chapter! Thanks for sharing!

TY!

Thanks Pati!

More, hopefully tonight!

Lili

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What Transpires at Night (Part 1)

Will she team up with yout slayer or attend the center

    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine
    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine

Nice

This is interesting start don’t know where it’s going yet.

hugs :)
Michelle SidheElf Amaianna