Lulu - 7 - Fatso and the Blonde

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Lulu

A Dark Comedy About Mistaken Identity

Chapter 7 - Fatso and the Blonde

by Lulu Martine

 
I gave up trying to figure it all out. The insanity of the situation seemed to weigh me down, I couldn’t have thought my way out of an elevator without someone else to push the buttons.

And I stopped getting much co-operation. No laptop, no cellphone and when my attempts at mime and charades got annoying, Alice turned on the TV. Daytime soap operas are druglike enough but the nurse came in every two or three hours with some real drugs.

No one said anything more about going home tomorrow. The nurse put an IV in my other arm and strapped both of them down to boards where I effectively could not use them at all.

Two doctors came in and started talking to Alice, though they all glanced at me now and then. I couldn’t hear what they were saying, Alice put the television headphones on me and I felt as if I had fallen again into a dream.

It was even worse when the TV channel got stuck on a Spanish language station. I couldn’t understand more than one word in five though I could sort of follow the stories in a broad way. I lost track of what was happening in the room. The drugs, the sounds I could not understand and a feeling of isolation made it easy to slip into a sort of trance.

There was one show, a kind of comedy variety slapstick thing, the title translated as “Fatso and the Blonde”, I think. It was obvious which of the characters was which. The fat guy looked sort of like every fat Mexican stereotype you’ve ever seen and the blonde was more of the same, sexy and ditzy in tight clothes and flashy jewelry.

She was really overbuilt, too, with her bosom on display and frequent turning away from the camera to waggle her butt. A laugh track, or maybe a studio audience, cued me in to which parts were supposed to be funny but really, if it would not have hurt my throat.

A peculiar thing began to happen. I started to identify with the blonde. I imagined how it would be to have everyone stare at my tits. And be able to distract guys like Fatso with just a hip wiggle and a smile. He kept running into doors and stepping on rakes when he turned to look at her.

Would I look like that when the bandages came off? All curves and smiles and winks, Lili, that was her name, acted like an empty-headed bimbo but she seemed to be enjoying herself.

And that got me to thinking. Would I be able to live and be happy with what had happened to me? I didn’t think anyone could change me back and that would involve more operations and pain and would I want to go through this again? Just to be an imitation of a man?

Another show came on, a news program. I recognized some of the news stories continuing from English language broadcasts I had seen before but some of the others were just noise. All but one of the newswomen on the show was blonde. Again, I found myself identifying with them instead of the guys.

Pretty women, all of them. Alice had said that Lulu wanted to be beautiful. Would I be beautiful? Would that matter? Would it be easier to adapt to being a girl if I could be a beautiful one?

Or was that just a crazy thought?

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Ok so I don't think I am getting this.

Why won't anybody listen to Marty? Even though this well written, the laws that have been broken in this story would put a real life person in prison for the rest of his or her life. Like I said in my last comment, this is taking forced feminization a bit too far.

"With confidence and forbearance, we will have the strength to move forward."

Love & hugs,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."

"With confidence and forbearance, we will have the strength to move forward."

Love & hugs,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."

Can't talk

It's actually mentioned several times that Marty cannot speak.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

Really?

S.L.Hawke's picture

Idle curiosity... have you ever, personally, had feminizing vocal surgery? I have... and while it is true that it is "not recommended" that you speak for a while... and even true that it is rather hard to speak (the surgery "cuts out" the bottom of your vocal range, so you tend to actually only manage to vocalize the upper notes of words that you are trying to say -- forcing you to learn to speak all over again)... there is one tiny but important detail that I recall.

I could not speak "normally"... but whispering uses an entirely different vocalization process. Yup, I *could* whisper, even just a few hours after surgery -- at a time when I was NOT supposed to be speaking, but certainly COULD whisper, when I needed to communicate. As Marty unquestionably should be able to whisper in some nurse's ear, no matter which surgical technique was done on her.

Which reminds me... exactly which technique was Marty supposed to have had done, anyway? CTA (Crico-Thyroidal Approximation)? FemLar (Feminizing Laryngoplasty)? Thyrohyoid approximation? Laryngeal reduction? LAVA ( Laser Assisted Voice Adjustment)? I assume it was one of these... although with any of them speech above a whisper is only "discouraged" for a week or so -- and you *can* still whisper...

Sorry if this seems a bit negative. I rather enjoyed the first few instalments of this story... but like several others, I have had increasing problems with my ability to suspend my disbelief, as this story progresses. Shrug. You have tried to make this too realistic... and yet at the same time, thrown in too many things that blatantly simply are not reality. A combination that keeps knocking me out of my immersion in the story...

As these are all quite short chapters, maybe back up and edit things a bit, to deal with some of the comments you are getting? I admit it would be a bit of a challenge... but I think this story line can still be both salvaged, and continue to where I am guessing you want it to go -- it just requires some creative editing of a few story details...

Read it again

It's consistent and accurate if you read what Marty is reporting and don't try to assume you know things Marty does not know.

The sources I have read, plus experiences of friends who have undergone various vocal surgeries, do not agree with what you are suggesting is your experience. They are, in fact, quite distinctly contrary.

Assume the events in the story are as accurately reported as a teenager thrust into that situation would be able to report them. Marty only knows what he is told and of that he understands only what a teenager would understand.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

Okay...

S.L.Hawke's picture

I read it all again... and I will grant that you used less definitive statements in the story, than in your comment here. I concede that Marty might actually *believe* that s/he can't speak -- although I still dispute that in fact Marty *could* whisper, if s/he was strongly motivated enough. And in fact you had him do precisely that, in chapter 4... although you had another character immediately shush him.

Quote: <<"I'm a boy," I siad in a squeaky whisper, not caring that I wasn't supposed to talk. It hurt and I touched the bandages on my throat.>>

Which brings me back to wondering why he isn't trying harder to communicate, since he *has* managed to whisper -- even if it did hurt?

I have absolutely no doubt that "most" of the literature agrees 100% with what you think is the case... and unless *extremely* motivated to break the "doctor recommended" post operative recovery advice, I would not be surprised if your friends accounts match that literature. As I said, if *does* hurt to talk that soon after surgery, so unless you really have a reason to do so, I am not surprised to hear that your friends (and probably most patients) never even try -- or if they absentmindedly try, feel the pain and stop immediately.

My own experience, however, involved a post operative complication that forced me to push through the pain, and speak anyway. Which in fact I was able to do, although I will grant you that it *really* hurt. By the way... although I said "most" of the literature earlier, I used that qualifier for a reason. If you try a web search for something like for the specific name of some of the surgeries, and throw in the word "recovery"... then do a little digging to select links to actual surgeon's sites... you will find that *some* of the surgeon's web site's flatly insist on no speech (including whispering) for a couple weeks... while other surgeon's sites state that you *can* whisper, and should merely refrain from speech for a week or so. The later case matches my experience... and being a medical professional myself, I am quite familiar with such discrepancies in doctor's advice. Obviously, it *is* possible... but not advisable. To get the best possible result, following the "more conservative" set of rules is recommended... but... my point was that Marty *could* do it, if Marty did not care about getting the best result, and just knew that something seriously wrong was happening. Something that he *really* needed to tell someone about.

As I said, though, in the story you did not make any absolute statements about his inability to speak -- just that he felt pain when trying, and that he was told not to do it. As a teenager... maybe it is possible he bought that official story hook, line, and sinker, and did not even try hard enough to push past the pain. Maybe he forgot about his earlier partial success, and just remembered the pain. I was mostly inspired to comment the first time, because you made a stronger statement in your own comment -- and I have noticed that ideas presented in one story here, tend to get recycled into someone else's work... so I thought all this worth mentioning.

I *do* have other concerns about this story's details, where things are breaking my ability to suspend my disbelief... but I don't want to discourage you from writing more, by posting a long article about all the medical flaws I can see in this thing. Smile. Probably most people are not bothered by them, as unless you are in the medical field (as I am), they might not be as glaringly obvious as they are to me...

I will make one comment about one thing, though, since while you have made strong hints in the story... you are not (yet) fully committed to this detail. The butt implants. Don't go there, please. I have also had BFS (Body Feminizing Surgery), and while at first I considered those implants... there are a whole lot of reasons why I did not do it. Fat graft transplants are a *much* better way of dealing with this issue... and while the highest priced surgeon's use a technique that involves weeks of laying on the stomach while things heal (not practical, in your story), there are alternate techniques without those restrictions -- which still could be worked into your story, easily, since so far Marty only vaguely knows that something was done to his butt. [The alternate technique injects the transplanted fat through canulas inserted through small incisions in the buttocks, by the way... which would still explain the bandages Marty has already noticed. (Which he *assumes* has something to do with butt implants that he "thought he had read somewhere about"... but no one has *yet* actually told him that this is actually what was done). You might want to throw in a reference (soon) to some abdominal bruising and an abdominal compression garment, from the liposuction to harvest the transplanted fat... but nothing you have written so far would need revision to do that. He *has* felt abdominal pain when sitting up, and while you probably intended that to be from the SRS, it also works for this procedure too. Plus the feminizing liposuction also gives a narrower waist, and a more "curvy" body than just the implants alone would... which I think would be useful, for where I imagine you are going with all this...]

Sigh. Don't mind me. I suppose rather than stating I am in the medical field... which I sort of still am... I should say I "used to be". These days, I mostly work with school kids, and teaching becomes such a habit that I tend to do it even when talking with adults -- who usually find my automatically correcting them more annoying than helpful. LOL. Part of why I usually limit myself to just reading here, rather than commenting.

Why ruin a perfectly good fictional story, by insisting on something as boring as the facts? Smile.

Do remember, it is fiction

Justifying the details of what I want to do with medical citations would not be fiction. Therefore, I don't. I know enough about the field to know that most of these sorts of things could be justified if one wanted to take the time.

If they are breaking your suspension of disbelief, well I've had that experience when someone writes a novel about my field, they better get enough details obviously right that I can keep my yammering little voices quiet.

Truth is stranger than fiction, and I could have gone with a slight SF setting to justify almost anything. But I did not want to do that. This story happens in what passes for the real world in most stories.

As for discouraging me from writing, yeah, this concentrated negativity over the last few days did that. I wrote nothing yesterday and nothing today. Fortunately, I have about ten of these short chapters already written. I'll post one later tonight or tomorrow.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

It's a freudian thing.

If it is forced then there is no personal fault. It is "just a story".

Khadijah

That's the appeal

For many readers, the appeal of a forced story is the lack of guilt feelings.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

Or not

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And for others, this is the ultimate horror. You start with a cis boy, force SRS on him, and either force him deep into closet as a trans boy or brainwash him into believing he is a girl. Considering what real-world religious right 'reparative therapy' is, the latter option is no less revolting than the former. Still, it's a well-written story.

Or....

Or you tell some other story. This is fiction. We only have to have verisimilitude, we're not doing investigative reporting.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

Lulu - 7 - Fatso and the Blonde

It is evident that Alice has paid off the staff so that Lulu goes to Prince.

    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine
    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine

That's one possibility

Or maybe it's a crooked insurance agent somewhere.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

Up to now this was a well

Up to now this was a well written start to a horror story, that bit at the end there however ruined it.

You can't brainwash a person that quickly, and given how slowly the rest of the story was developing I'd have expected you to stretch out the brainwash portion a significantly longer.

Jump to conclusions much?

One, you're wrong about breaking someone's will (aka brainwashing) and two, that's not what this is.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

Chapter Length

This looks like it might be a good story, but the chapters are too short, which makes for a choppy story telling. Try more than a half of a page chapter. It is hard to keep up with what is happening with such short chapters.

Bobbie E

Then wait

This is how it's being written and posted. If you don't like to read short chapters, check in once a week.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

Optimum Chapter Length

I wonder what is the ideal chapter length?

Khadijah

The Lincoln ideal

Like Abe Lincoln's legs that were long enough to reach the ground, the ideal chapter is long enough to reach the end.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

The ideal chapter length

Is the one that keeps the readers engaged. Too short and the readers drop out. Too long and they don't start in the first place unless they have a lot of free time in one sitting. Like drinking water when you are thirsty: if it is served to you in shot glasses you get annoyed and go someplace where there are bigger servings. If it comes in gallon jugs you may get all you want, but the jug is so-o big it is difficult to handle and you end up leaving most of it behind.

. . . .

Light travels faster than sound. This is why some people appear bright until they speak.


I went outside once. The graphics weren' that great.

A good enough definition

But if the chapters are too short for one reader, that reader has a solution, mentioned here several times. The fault is not with being too short to be engaging, the problem seems to be rather that people are engaged and do not want to wait.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

So far

So far, this is well written story, but more than comedy, it comes near to horror. I just don´t see anything funny in it, worth even giggle. I would expect at least some black joke, but only one I see is plot one - guy is mistaken for someone else, made girl, than bounded and muted, and to finish work brainwashed into bimbo. Not my cup of tea. Just really spooky.
Robin

Some people just won't laugh

At a concept like Fatso and the Blonde, I guess.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

Agreed

Although I'm not sure I'd say it stops at being merely "near horror". According to the author I'm jumping to conclusions so I suppose it might be only near horror.

A bit of horror

There's a bit of horror here and frankly, there may well be more of it. It's the nature of the story I'm trying to tell. This is a story about the accidental castration and mutilation of a teenager. Unless I did it as straight slapstick, it certainly would be horrifying to many. And some people have to leave the room when the Three Stooges are on.

Oh, the humanity.

The chapters are short. Until people started complaining about that, they were going up almost daily. That wasn't a counter complaint it was a joke.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

I don't quite know what to say here...

I kept thinking that someone would admit that "Lulu" wasn't Lulu, then with horror realized that accommodations had been reached and our poor "heroine" was being forced down the path to feminization. But then it became clear to me that you've built this story around someone who either did not realize what sex they truly identified with, or was flexible enough to go with what was happening, at least in respect to their appearance. I hope our Lulu lays down the law about the rest of Prince's agenda. If she wishes to now be Lulu, that's fine, but only on her terms.

SuZie

SuZie

Thanks

And thanks for taking time to read the chapters.

Lulu

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

- Gender is between the ears, sex is between the legs and anywhere else you can get it. - Lulu Martine

Chapter Length

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Has anyone here not read a James Patterson novel. He had nice, short little chapters and they work really well for him. I think they work really well here too.

Who?

Never heard of him.

. . . .

Light travels faster than sound. This is why some people appear bright until they speak.


I went outside once. The graphics weren' that great.

James Patterson

He writes Murder Mysteries... right??? I've never read any, but he's pretty prolific in the bookstores.

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Please Carry On With This

Dear Ms Martine,

I do hope that you are going to continue this tale. Besides it being very well written, you have created a situation with all kinds of possibilities for being resolved, with promises of all manner of conflicts arising, and I am sure everyone is feeling really concerned for the poor boy, and we do NOT want him left hanging in the air like this.

It could go in several different directions, couldn't it.

Briar

Briar