The Faithful Wife

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A good start......

D. Eden's picture

And an intriguing idea - but I would suggest finding a good editor. The story line is promising, but you have multiple grammatical errors. Someone to proofread and correct them would be a good idea.

Please consider this constructive criticism, and keep writing. I hope to see where you take this.

Dallas

D. Eden

Dum Vivimus, Vivamus

Deleep

licorice's picture

I'm sorry I was confused, did she have her father executed?

Nice start

Will there be more to this? I hope that she gets to the US and starts a new life. Great start.

I've had a lot of non military exposure to Middle Eastern culture, and it changed me. Several of my stories are set in those cultures.

Gwen