The Venus Touch 9

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The Venus Touch IX
by Melanie T

Edited by Kristine Roland

Alyssa turns into a real responsibility.

 


 
This text is (c) 2009 by Melanie. All rights reserved.
 
 
Thirty-four

I stared at her with my mouth open for what seemed like 5 minutes, but really couldn't have been more than a few seconds.

Stacy was sobbing, “I'm sorry, she made me do it...” over and over again.

I found my mind was sluggish, I could not muster enough concentration to use any magic. Also, I was unable to move.

Alyssa smiled coldly, “Don't bother trying, I have damped your mind to where you can't use magic, and you can't move, either. You have caused a lot of trouble for me, hiding as well as you did. I don't like getting in trouble, especially not through some little girl.”

She went on, “You're my ticket to get back into the Council's good graces. It's you they want and you they shall have. I will be reinstated when I deliver you!”

She took out a pair of handcuffs and put them on me. After she took a step back, I found I could move again. I seemed to recall that this sort of spell was somewhat taxing, holding someone in this state required constant energy expenditure and vigilance. Now, she visibly relaxed.

“Now, I'm going to walk out of here with you. No one will see or hear you, don't even think about crying for help. We will get into the car and I will deliver you to... wherever,” she stopped short of naming the place, then continued, “and then I will finally be rid of you,”

By this time, I was really scared; I was worried about what would happen to me. Why did they want me that badly? I was no danger to them and not even a fully trained sorceress. They couldn't know of my secret studies, could they?

My eyes flickered over to Stacy, who stirred and looked up.

Alyssa said, “We don't have any use for her anymore,” and turned to aim her hand at her to cast a spell. I panicked; she was about to kill the only friend I had left.

At this moment, the distress level of my tracer was reached and a sphere of energy emanated outward and sped away into the distance. Alyssa was distracted by the force of the energy, she was the receiver for that tracer, but it wasn't meant to trigger with her so close by.

She raised a hand to her head and her concentration broke. My mind was suddenly free to work and I reached into the well of spells I had learned. Any spell, any spell at all, any that looked strong!

I reached for a glowing rune, raised it up and imbued it with power, and spoke its name to release it. I didn't even know what it was, I had no time to look in my memory for the symbol, I just cast it. It was all I could do.

Purple energy surrounded Alyssa, who gave a short shriek and froze in place.

Slowly, she began to change, began to shrink, no, not just shrink, she was getting younger! I saw fear in her eyes, then it faded to a total lack of comprehension and finally it was replaced by a child's innocence. A cute girl, around three years old, stood in front of me. She looked at me with eyes wide and said “Mommy?”

Thirty-five

Stacy had watched the transformation with a totally incredulous stare. She said “Wow,” and blinked, “did I just see what I think I did? Was that you?”

“Afraid so,” I said, regaining my composure, “and not even a bit sorry for it.”

“It's poetic justice, in a way,” Stacy said, “she has chosen an evil path, but some good was left in her. Now she has a second chance.”

I pulled up a spell, visualized it and spoke the word, and with a click the handcuffs came loose. I dropped them on the floor and rubbed my wrists.

I nodded, looking at it that way, I had found the best spell imaginable for the situation. I really hadn't wanted to kill her; I had not forgotten that she had let me get away. “Maybe that was the one decent thing she's done in her life,” I mused.

“Anyway,” I said, “we have some decisions to make. One adversary is gone, but we know there are others who want me, and if Alyssa isn't successful, they will send someone else. We have surprise on our side right now, but I don't know how long that will last.”

“We also have a three year old girl that we can't just leave here.” I said. “Stacy, this is going to be a hard decision. If you come with me now, you will probably leave this life behind. I don't think you can come back here until this is resolved, and by that time, this,” I motioned around the apartment, “is probably not going to be here anymore.”

“I'm not expecting you to give up your life and your job to help me.”

“But, if you stay, they could come to you, looking for me. They have shown themselves to be deceitful and evil, resorting to violence to get their way. You might be in danger if you stay.”

Stacy said, “I had already made up my mind when you called. I'm with you all the way. Look at this, what do I have? I have a low paying job, a small apartment and no one to share it with. My family is not speaking to me because I love women. I can't see my life going anywhere here.”

“You have shown me a world of excitement. Sure, there is danger, but that looks much better than boredom, from where I stand.”

She smiled and continued, looking at me, “And I'd much rather be with you!”

That got me. After that one remark at the very beginning, she hadn't let on that she might be feeling this way, and I had thought it was just something said by way of making a compliment.

I smiled back at her, but didn't know what to say, so I gave her a hug and she turned it into a kiss. We were interrupted by Alyssa, when she said “Mommy?” again.

I guessed that was me. Oh God, what was I going to do now?

End of part nine

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I believe Alice said it best

Andrea Lena's picture

Curiouser and curiouser!!! New powers, a devoted girlfriend who accepts her, and now a child to raise? Wow...I simply adore this story. Thank you again.


She was born for all the wrong reasons but grew up for all the right ones.
God bless you all! Andrea

  

To be alive is to be vulnerable. Madeleine L'Engle
Love, Andrea Lena

I'm spellbound

laika's picture

Short, maybe, but a lot happened here and it was perfect. Had to laugh now at the understatement of:
"Alyssa turns into a real responsibility..." A ready-made family? I dunno, but this is a great story!
~~~hugs, Laika

Very good story!

Outstanding plot, with lots of contemporary political implications. I won't miss further installments.

I love you all...

I am not sure

But it seems that Charissa has played her hand once again - giving Ronnie a Second Life Curse. Now, I am cemenred in my thoughts that Charissa is the creator of the original Man Eater Curse. And apparently she is extremely proficient with this kind of spells.

What happens next? Charissa needs to escape, and uses Ronnie as a unknowing agent. Now, what does she need?
1)A key to her prison - most likely Elders have it.
2)A place where she can return to her power - likely in possession of the Council
3)Absence of outside influences that can disturb her. I really doubt she has turned over a new leaf, but it is possible (not probable, but possible) that she has mellowed after her time in prison and is not likely to strike out at Ronnie. If that is the case, she may become Ronnie's mentor of sorts.

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leaving us looking over the cliff....I never did like heights!!!

Kirri

A little tip for dialog

When you have the same person talking over multiple paragraph breaks, the closing quotation mark of every paragraph EXCEPT for the very last one should be dropped. i.e.

John said "blah blah blah.

"blah blah blah."

This helps the reader know that the next paragraph is the same person talking. It helps to remove ambiguity over who's saying what in a dialog-heavy section. To take a section of your dialog as an example, this is how is should be written:

“We also have a three year old girl that we can't just leave here.” I said. “Stacy, this is going to be a hard decision. If you come with me now, you will probably leave this life behind. I don't think you can come back here until this is resolved, and by that time, this,” I motioned around the apartment, “is probably not going to be here anymore.

“I'm not expecting you to give up your life and your job to help me.

“But, if you stay, they could come to you, looking for me. They have shown themselves to be deceitful and evil, resorting to violence to get their way. You might be in danger if you stay.”

I hope you find these tips helpful.

O.K. you all probably expect this of me.

Jezzi Stewart's picture

Actually, given what we have so far, I would say she did kill Alyssa; however, it was in self-defense. Whatever Alyssa did, though, it's not the new child's fault, so with her use of power has come responsibility - a good lesson, I think, for "mommy".

"All the world really is a stage, darlings, so strut your stuff, have fun, and give the public a good show!" Miss Jezzi Belle at the end of each show

BE a lady!

Mommy?

terrynaut's picture

Awwwww. Three-year-olds are so cute. I think it's fitting punishment for her crimes.

Stacy and Ronni are back together and they have an instant family with a new daughter. Yay!

Thanks very much for the story. I thought I could stop at this chapter but it was much too short. So off I go to chapter 10.

- Terry

Interesting!

This gets more convoluted and twisted by the episode. I don't suppose any of those spell books contained the incantations to produce psychic paper, or temporary obedience?

If some spells / enchanted objects can be made accessible to non-magical people (can we get away with using the M word? <grin>), then Ronnie could erect wards around the new apartment that could be activated / deactivated by Stacy.

Of course, as ever with good stories, by solving one problem (mercenary Alyssa) they've created another (toddler Alyssa). And if the new Alyssa still has the same magical competence as the old one, Ronnie will quickly have to get very familiar with warding!

 


There are 10 kinds of people in the world - those who understand binary and those who don't...

As the right side of the brain controls the left side of the body, then only left-handers are in their right mind!

The Venus Touch 9

Now they need to find some way to deal with Alyssa and possibly find a GOOD WITCH COVEN.

    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine
    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine

"mommy?"

well that's one problem solved ...

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