Cutting room floor: Alternate scene of The Brain

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This is a scene for my story The Brain that didn't make the cut. I thought you might like to see this and give me your comments on it.

The scene could replace the one where Gwen and Beth are reaching out to Anna, to see how she would react to the feminized Gwen. It takes place at Chucky Cheese Pizza.

As serious as a boy growing breasts can be.

I can see from you expression that you're not kidding, where is Greg?

Just look to your left Anna.

Anna looked left and saw Gwen tentatively approaching. Unconsciously Anna had grabbed the glass Parmesan cheese shaker. She just shook her head and shouted, "You pervert, you have some nerve coming to this store dressed as a girl."

Anna hurled the cheese shaker at Gwen. Gwen ducked and the shaker sailed by and hit a waiter in the back as he was delivering a super-giant special pizza to a birthday party. The pizza flew through the air and landed greasy side down on the lap of a mother wearing a mini skirt to her daughter’s birthday party. The melted cheese began to burn the skin of the mother who leaped up trying to brush the pizza off her bare legs. She bumps a waitress with several full pitchers of tea who promptly dumps the tea on several senior citizens who came to relive some of the better younger days.

Undaunted Anna picks up the napkin dispenser to throw at Gwen. She again misses because Beth dove over the table to prevent Gwen from getting injured. The napkin dispenser hits the assistant manager on the nose, breaking it. He only came in to see what the disturbance was.

One kid hollered food fight and about forty kids either began hurling food or ducking under their table. A group of teens begin banging on the arcade machines trying to break open the coin boxes in the ensuing mayhem. Beth bets Anna in a headlock and Gwen rushes in to save her. She slips on a piece of pizza and slides under the table catching the center post between her legs and knocking over her two friends. Three guys who were eating pizza and drinking beer while having a verbal disagreement carry it to the next level and begin openly fighting. Tables begin flying and turning over.

Susan and Linda arrive at Chucky Cheeses to lend moral support to Beth and Gwen were stopped a block away from there by a line of Police cars and ambulances. They park and approach the police line as a group of people were being escorted to a jail transfer bus. Linda almost fainted as she saw Gwen handcuffed to Beth handcuffed to Anna handcuffed to…

Susan bailed the kids out of jail. It took several days to find Gwen in Juvie hall on the girls side. She had been separated from Beth and had actually been housed with Anna who had been misidentified by the authorities as a juvenile.

Gwen sported a half dozen tattoos including a handcuff tattoo on her left arm, a line tattoo of three tears on her left cheek, a rose and barb wire tattoo on her lower back and a dragon tattoo on her right inner thigh.

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Seriously I wrote this to play with John in Wawawherever.

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Evil...EVIL!

This is why the Brookfield WI police fear responding to a disturbance at their local Chunky Cheese.

Poor Gwen.

And police misidentifing suspects happens all too often.

John in Wauwatosa whose keyboard is acting up a lot this morning.

P.S. this mean you might have more to of this tale soon?

P.P.S. Really true about Brookfield. It made the national press. They fear, rightly, the mix of out of control kids and adults who are served liquor at the location.

John in Wauwatosa

Umm wow that's

very scary. the chucky cheese bit was so funny, comedy of errors bit. But the tattoos are nightmare time

Goddess Bless you

Love Desiree